A young woman in search of her parents finds herself in a fight for her life when an extraterrestrial warrior believe her to be a legendary weapon created to defend against the invader.

>>>her real abilities show until she's older (when the story starts).

Okay, that could work if the film story begins with the emergence of her extra-human abilities in puberty. (I have no idea what they are, but I assume you've got that figured out.)

I suggest for the purpose of the logline that having her looking for her parents be considered as a long term narrative arc for the franchise.? One that need not be included in a logline for the origin chapter.? It's a goal she takes on later after she's become fully aware of her powers, the implications and the cosmic stakes.? Just as Luke Skywalker doesn't know who he really is and what is at stake for him in using the Force until the "Big Reveal" at the end of the second chapter of the original "Star Wars" franchise.

The logline for the origin chapter of your saga should focus on her most immediate and urgent objective goal in that chapter.? Which is...?

>>>her real abilities show until she's older (when the story starts).

Okay, that could work if the film story begins with the emergence of her extra-human abilities in puberty. (I have no idea what they are, but I assume you've got that figured out.)

I suggest for the purpose of the logline that having her looking for her parents be considered as a long term narrative arc for the franchise.? One that need not be included in a logline for the origin chapter.? It's a goal she takes on later after she's become fully aware of her powers, the implications and the cosmic stakes.? Just as Luke Skywalker doesn't know who he really is and what is at stake for him in using the Force until the "Big Reveal" at the end of the second chapter of the original "Star Wars" franchise.

The logline for the origin chapter of your saga should focus on her most immediate and urgent objective goal in that chapter.? Which is...?

Thanks DPG for the help,

How could she not know growing up she's not a normal human?? The idea here, she's pretty normal looking with none of her real abilities show until she's older (when the story starts).? She's always felt different, but who hasn't.? It's not like she can pick up a car and not think twice about it.

Hopefully this will become a franchise on a larger scale.? As it is, this is a follow up to a movie I made a while ago.

I've been thinking about all the tips here and have some idea's for tweaking the script now so that's exciting, can't wait.