A self-focused haematologist battles thousands of enemies to reach her boyfriend and save their relationship after learning he plans to dump her when he returns from a week long live-action role-playing tournament.

You raised a number of issues; I wish I had time to respond in full. Suffice to say for now that I have always considered loglines to be about selling the sizzle, not the describing the steak.

IMHO, the sizzle in your logline is not hematology, nor a self-centered character, nor being dumped. The sizzle is the social phenomenon of LARP. That's what makes your concept stand out. LARP is a social phenomenon begging for someone to write a script about. I hope yours is the first to be sold sold and produced.

FWIW: focus on the sizzle in the logline, the steak in the script.

You raised a number of issues; I wish I had time to respond in full. Suffice to say for now that I have always considered loglines to be about selling the sizzle, not the describing the steak.

IMHO, the sizzle in your logline is not hematology, nor a self-centered character, nor being dumped. The sizzle is the social phenomenon of LARP. That's what makes your concept stand out. LARP is a social phenomenon begging for someone to write a script about. I hope yours is the first to be sold sold and produced.

FWIW: focus on the sizzle in the logline, the steak in the script.

nicholasandrewhalls:

You raised a number of issues I wish I had the time to respond to. Suffice to say for now that I have always considered loglines to be about selling the sizzle, not the describing the steak.

IMHO, the sizzle in your logline is not hematology, or a self-centered character, or being dumped. The sizzle -- what makes your story stand out as something unique and intriguing -- is the social phenomenon of LARP. It's a phenomenon begging for some to write a script about. I hope yours is the first that gets sold and produced.

FWIW: focus on the sizzle in the logline, the steak in the script.