A smart sophisticated business woman comes across a document that ends up pushing her to a limit beyond her control.

As others have noted.? The logline is vague and presents her as a passive, reactive victim of the document.? Protagonist's are supposed to be proactive not reactive.

The document contains a discovery.? The discovery constitutes the inciting incident. That needs to be stated with greater specificity.

As a result of this discovery, she must do something.? What must she do?? What becomes her objective goal?

I suggest you consult "Formula" at the top of the web page for guidelines on writing an industry standard logline.

fwiw

As others have noted.? The logline is vague and presents her as a passive, reactive victim of the document.? Protagonist's are supposed to be proactive not reactive.

The document contains a discovery.? The discovery constitutes the inciting incident. That needs to be stated with greater specificity.

As a result of this discovery, she must do something.? What must she do?? What becomes her objective goal?

I suggest you consult "Formula" at the top of the web page for guidelines on writing an industry standard logline.

fwiw

Yeah, good advice, bivric. This won't get a pass by the cliche police for sure.