by Aidan Soguero · Logliner · 210 pts
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I love historical stories but this is what I need to know.
So he's a 20th century American who creates the ACLU (had to look it up),? but struggles to maintain it because of his past? Because of supremists?? Because of ?? What stops the movement growing? What impact does it have?? What's his role - is it him and his mates? A couple of lawyers? Is he white? what made him start this movement?
I think some obstacles to the goal of creating the ACLU? would help align the story especially if it's a specific person as opposed to the ACLU group as a whole.
Sounds very interesting.
So a 20th century American white lawyer?? creates the ACLU because? but struggles to maintain it because? racists, bullies, government, his reputation, betrayal??? All ideas-? I don't know the story but if I know what he's fighting against and who he is it tells me the conflict....
>>> most people are familiar with the ACLU but not with Roger Baldwin.
I think your logline ought to include both.
What is the overarching objective goal (or relationship) that drives the plot?
>>>while coming to terms with his own ethically dubious past
Hmm.? I suggest that could be a problem in terms of the plotting? (and a logline for it). A plot is about what the protagonist is looking forward to, not back upon. About achieving a future objective goal, not resolving a subjective problem embedded in the past.
>>> most people are familiar with the ACLU but not with Roger Baldwin.
I think your logline ought to include both.
What is the overarching objective goal (or relationship) that drives the plot?
>>>while coming to terms with his own ethically dubious past\
Hmm.? I suggest that could be a problem in terms of the plotting? (and a logline for it). A plot is about what the protagonist is looking forward to, not back upon. About achieving a future objective goal, not resolving a subjective problem embedded in the past.
