A struggling CIA consultant fights for survival after a secretive and morally corrupt government agency forces him to kill his team by overwriting his consciousness with that of an assassin’s.

Great tip. I will look to rewrite to show how to illustrate that there is a temporary aspect.

Yep, getting a few key memories to really give the antagonist the opportunity to know exactly where to strike the protagonist, what would really hurt the guy, what would make him turn himself in.

The killer should have better control over what has happened, while the protagonist struggles to remain in control unable to deal with the horrific imagery now in his mind, but as mentioned it is because of the swap he will have a chance of survival.

So I guess I could also have the killer lose a memory that perhaps hindered him from becoming something even more dangerous, which is now I the head of the protagonist.

Really appreciate the feedback.

Thanks for the clarification. The premise raise all kinds of interesting complications and plot twists that you can't cram into a logline, of course. But If you can slip in a few words that it's a temporary swap out without inordinately lengthening the logline, I think it might be a winner.

On suggestion (beyond the scope of the logline) is that as a result of the swap out the antagonist gains a few high cards in his hand (mind actually), to play, too. Better yet, he comes out ahead as a result of the swap in terms of memories,cognitive ability, whatever.

Or at least that mental instability is a side-effect in the brain of the good guy, too, as a character flaw. (An unavoidable hazard for all consciousness's involved in the swap.)

I suggest that because one of the standard m.o.'s for escalating suspense and jeopardy is for the bad guy to get all the luck, all the breaks. The good guys get none; he has to work for everything.

fwiw

Thanks for the clarification. The premise raise all kinds of interesting complications and plot twists that you can't cram into a logline, of course. But If you can slip in a few words that it's a temporary swap out without inordinately lengthening the logline, I think it might be a winner.

On suggestion (beyond the scope of the logline) is that as a result of the swap out the antagonist gains a few high cards in his hand (mind actually), to play, too. Better yet, he comes out ahead as a result of the swap in terms of memories,cognitive ability, whatever.

Or at least that mental instability is a side-effect in the brain of the good guy, too, as a character flaw. (An unavoidable hazard for all consciousness's involved in the swap.)

I suggest that because one of the standard m.o.'s for escalating suspense and jeopardy is for the bad guy to get all the luck, all the breaks. The good guys get none; he has to work for everything.

fwiw