After being revived from a near drowning, a conservative Christian teen must endure being tormented by an evil dwarf-like creature when his mother doesn’t believe him. (26)

by Billy14 · Logliner · 490 pts 921 views

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Have you ever tried telling someone you saw a ghost?
Have you ever had a really strange experience and failed dismally in trying to communicate it to other people?
Have you ever given up on trying to explain something that you already know people will never believe?

Well, this story is ALL about that 🙂

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Former member · Singularity · 114,965 pts

Billy14:

IMHO:
The theodicy of the Book Job was a hard sell when it was originally written way ?back when -- which is why a ?"happy ending" chapter was tacked on. ?Otherwise, the book would not have made the cut, been included in the official canon. ?(I write this as someone who has spent no small measure of time pondering the dialectics of the book.)

It's an even harder sell today in the era of feel good, ?I'm OK, You're OK, prosperity religion. ?And your theodic theme is not made easier to sell by afflicting an innocent teen with the contrivnace of a malevolent dwarf-like creature. ?Especially when there are so many real life options (incurable diseases, inherited disablities, natural disasters, accidents) with which to unjustly, unfairly torment the kid.

I just don't see the ?market for the concept. ?I could be wrong and if you can prove me so, more power to you. ?And I will be the 1st one in the ticket line to see the movie.

IMHO

dogger · Singularity · 87,055 pts

Billy14:

IMHO:
The theodicy of the Book Job was a hard sell when it was originally written way ?back when -- which is why a ?"happy ending" chapter was tacked on. ?Otherwise, the book would not have made the cut, been included in the official canon. ?(I write this as someone who has spent no small measure of time pondering the dialectics of the book.)

It's an even harder sell today in the era of feel good, ?I'm OK, You're OK, prosperity religion. ?And your theodic theme is not made easier to sell by afflicting an innocent teen with the contrivnace of a malevolent dwarf-like creature. ?Especially when there are so many real life options (incurable diseases, inherited disablities, natural disasters, accidents) with which to unjustly, unfairly torment the kid.

I just don't see the ?market for the concept. ?I could be wrong and if you can prove me so, more power to you. ?And I will be the 1st one in the ticket line to see the movie.

IMHO

Billy14 · Logliner · 490 pts

God allowed Satan to torment Job. Yes. As God allowed the evil dwarf like creature to torment my protagonist.

Job was a good man. He had no flaw. Or did he? I don't think he did.

Neither does my protagonist. He's just a normal teen, who after an accident starts being tormented by "the devil" ... and nobody believes him. Nobody helps him. He just ... endures it until finally he can't take it anymore and surrenders to it. And by surrendering himself to it, he discovers what I think Job discovered ... a way to communicate, to converse with whatever it is that we call God.

That is why the "flawless" Job was made to suffer. By human standards he was without flaw. But in the eyes of God there was still one thing he had to learn, and at the end of his story he learns it, he finally knows without a doubt in his mind that The Kingdom of God is in this world but men do not see it.

Job saw it. And my protagonist sees it.

How do I write a logline for a protagonist whose only real flaw is that he had an accident that changed his perception of reality?

Thanks for your reply dpg. You're forcing me to think differently. I get stuck in my thinking quite often.