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...I think dpg's bang on -- from where I sit the affair ( and the marriage) is what's on the line -- It's the biggest compelling plot element, and would juicify (wha?) the logline a plenty...
anyways -- much luck.
If the dad is the hero, then I think the inciting incident needs to be from his POV -- atm his daughter makes a discovery -- it's 'after something happens' to HER... maybe have a play with 'After something happens' to a dominated but loyal husband and father etc...
Anyway -- best of luck again, Richiev.
Richiev:
I like Tony's concept. This makes the marriage the stakes issue, the dad the stakes character. And I think it can be melded into your concept. That is, the daughter encourages and engineers his transformation so that he will stick up for himself, confront the wife.
Which raises the question: do you conceive that the marriage is worth saving? (Which requires a transformation on the part of the wife.) Or must it be sacrificed for the sake of the father's growth and long term happiness?
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