After the discovery of a file containing orchestrated events that lead to a discharged solider and his military gang’s demise. The crew must race against time through the downtown streets of Miami to escape the CIA’s manhunt, leading to a series of unexpected events, including murder. Bounded by this ill fate the gang must pull off their notorious plan or risk the reality of dying.

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Red Vendetta

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Former member · Legend · 114,968 pts

Simplify, simplify, simplify. For loglines, less is almost always more.

dogger · Legend · 87,055 pts

Simplify, simplify, simplify. For loglines, less is almost always more.

sduah · Penpusher · 40 pts

haha no he's not smuggling money because its his patriotic duty.There is a reason for its not just greed, but isn't that too much to include in a logline? or maybe i should take out the smuggling of the money as it might lead people to wondering how its linked

Richiev · Legend · 58,825 pts

Ooops I just read what I wrote, a minor change: Him instead of himself :) a bit less confusing that way.
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When a dishonorable discharged solider stumbles upon a CIA plan to murder him and his ex-squad-mates, the team must kill their assassins and smuggle 100 million to Cuba.
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When a dishonorable discharged solider stumbles upon a CIA plan to murder hims and his ex-squad-mates, his team must kill their assassins while figuring out how to smuggle their families out of the country.?

Richiev · Legend · 58,825 pts

I think I will attempt to shorten your version of the logline only changing a few minor details.

Your logline:
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A dishonorable discharged solider is torn between the love for his country and vengeance when he stumbles upon a future murder plot of himself and his military brothers by rogue CIA agents. The team must pull their skills and resources together to kill their assassins in order to smuggle 100 million to Cuba.
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Shortened logline:
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When a dishonorable discharged solider stumbles upon a CIA plan to murder himself and his ex-squad-mates, the team must kill their assassins and smuggle 100 million to Cuba.
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However, the end of this logine does need to be changed, I do believe DPG's correct, the smuggling aspect of the logline is out of place.
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"When a dishonorable discharged solider stumbles upon a CIA plan to murder himself and his ex-squad-mates, his team must kill their assassins while figuring out how to smuggle their families out of the country."

Hope that helped