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There are two plot issues in this version: monopolization of the seed supply via GMO and replacing peasant farmers with robots. Which one is the inciting incident? Which one constitutes the main struggle of the plot?
And while raiding a seed bank may enable the peasant farmers to reclaim their supply of seeds, what will it do to eliminate the robots?
There are two plot issues in this version: monopolization of the seed supply via GMO and replacing peasant farmers with robots. Which one is the inciting incident? Which one constitutes the main struggle of the plot?
And while raiding a seed bank may enable the peasant farmers to reclaim their supply of seeds, what will it do to eliminate the robots?
When Subas cut's off their food supply, a young farmer must lead a raid of the heavily guarded seed bank if his village is to survive.
Many thanks for the input. The missing elements are in my notes - just not yet in the logline. The update looks like this:
Valour is left to lead a ragged band of survivors to raid a remote seed bank, after Subas cuts off their supply to GMO seeds and seeks to wipe out the last of the refugees and replace them with robots.
Thanks for all the great comments everybody! I think this is starting to work:
Valour leads a ragged band of survivors to raid the heavily guarded seed bank, in a last ditch attempt to win back their future before Subas, bent on genocide, destroys what little is left of humanity and the free world.
I would focus on a specific character ( a farmer perhaps) who struggles against (The State is a little vague) a specific antagonist to obtain a specific goal.
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