On the eve of their 50th wedding anniversary dinner, Uncles Mark and Robert, help their family come to terms with alcoholism, an issue threatening to destroy a beloved nephew.

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The Uncles – Love is Love

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MichaelHag · Logliner · 460 pts

Hi Mark, in loglines we usually omit character names:
On the eve of his gay uncle's anniversary dinner, a troubled man must again battle with alcohol and the impact it continues to have on the family; all the while celebrating enduring love.
my two cents for you

DaddyBear Mark · Penpusher · 115 pts

Okay.....
Is this more of what you are wanting to see/read?

On the eve of his gay uncle's anniversary dinner, Marcus must again battle with alcohol and the impact it continues to have on the family; all the while celebrating enduring love.

Former member · Singularity · 114,968 pts

Still confused. "On the eve of their 50th wedding anniversary dinner" refers to who?

And who is the protagonist?

dogger · Singularity · 87,055 pts

Still confused. "On the eve of their 50th wedding anniversary dinner" refers to who?

And who is the protagonist?

typingfilms · Penpusher · 250 pts

As long as you keep the word count 25-35 words, including these extra bits of info helps clarify the story details. It wont be a synopsis. It needs to imply what happens in the beginning, middle and end (but no spoilers).

Who is the main character? Is it the nephew or one of the uncles? The best loglines tend to have one main character who drive the plot.

DaddyBear Mark · Penpusher · 115 pts

Really? It's not implied that the uncles are the ones celebrating and that they being two men are in fact a Gay couple? Is it necessary to point out such an obvious detail?

Former member · Singularity · 114,968 pts

Uncles... 50th anniversary? Whose 50th anniversary? Are these 'uncles' a gay couple? If so, it's okay to say so. (The U.S. Supreme Court has spoken.) If not, please clarify.

dogger · Singularity · 87,055 pts

Uncles... 50th anniversary? Whose 50th anniversary? Are these 'uncles' a gay couple? If so, it's okay to say so. (The U.S. Supreme Court has spoken.) If not, please clarify.

DaddyBear Mark · Penpusher · 115 pts

Hmmm....incudung all that, wouldn't that make it more of a synopsis than a logline?

On the eve of their 50th wedding anniversary dinner, Uncles Mark and Robert, help their family come to terms with alcoholism, an issue threatening to destroy a beloved nephew.

Something like this perhaps?

typingfilms · Penpusher · 250 pts

It would be interesting to know what the issues are so that we get an idea of the subject matter, the stakes, the theme? You also say 'some' not all, so who are the some?