Caldwell Studios’ hotshot producer signs off on his most successful but self-destructive movie director to film his most ambitious film yet. The director is hellbent to drive his actress-wife and everyone around him insane onset of the troubled film production. I know this is wrong— I need help. I’m not good writing loglines. Can somebody help construct a logline with these elements? There’s a love triangle in this film between these characters.

by ComplexMuse · Penpusher · 160 pts 711 views

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Adam Bernstr?m · Samurai · 1,505 pts

Your logline did bring The Shining to mind, but not so much the movie itself as the behind the scenes documentary, how Stanley Kubrick abused Shelley Duvall, turning her into a nervous wreck.

You also remind me of The Stunt Man, from 1980, where Peter O'Toole plays a very overbearing director.
It could be worth watching both of those unless you've already done that.
I agree with what the others said, that you need a clear protagonist in the logline, a goal, who's trying to stop him, or her, and what's at stake.
Former member · Singularity · 114,968 pts

It's your story, your call. ?Who do you want to be the protagonist? ?From whose point of view do you wish to tell the story?

And again: ?what's the objective goal of the protagonist? ?For that matter, what's the point of the movie -- what's the overarching theme??

Also, in what time period is this set? ?The ungolden age of the studio system? ?The present? ?Or...?

dogger · Singularity · 87,055 pts

It's your story, your call. ?Who do you want to be the protagonist? ?From whose point of view do you wish to tell the story?

And again: ?what's the objective goal of the protagonist? ?For that matter, what's the point of the movie -- what's the overarching theme??

Also, in what time period is this set? ?The ungolden age of the studio system? ?The present? ?Or...?