Due to a train crash, Alice and Phil meet and fall in love; Benjamin discourages, Zelda encourages: three people challenge each other resulting in new lives for all of them with the help of the fourth.

Hi,
The length of your answers makes me think that it annoys you - or that you do not like being taken for guinea pigs - ;-)
I put my logline compliant version into a new post (Alice Ashton 2). What do you think of it?

Now I will look a little over YOUR loglines! :-)

Kind regards

Dear Callum.S, Dear nicholasandrewhalls

Thank you very much!
This logline is a marketing tool and you are my guinea pigs!

I have already written it? with all these details but I would rather not reveal entirely the story.
This is also the reason why I give only the names of the characters, but I may be wrong as I know them, and you don't.
My goal is that it makes you want to know more and read the synopsis.

Please tell me : Is that so? or on the contrary is it annoying?

Thank-you for your answer.

I'll put the "compliant" logline online a little later.

Is Alice your protagonist? (The film is titled after her). If so, focus the logline on her, even if the intent is for an ensemble piece.

Your event is a train crash. I can visualize that.

I have no idea what I'm likely to watch as Alice and Phil meet and fall in love. I presume this is the crux of the story, but how is it handled? What is Alice's goal - is she pursuing Phil or trying to avoid him? What does she DO in the film ... and who is trying to stop her?

I don't know what I'm looking at with Benjamin and Zelda's characters either. What does a character encouraging and another discouraging LOOK like? And is this a conflict that can sustain an entire feature?

The second part of the logline "three people challenge each other ..." is really just marketing fluff - it doesn't tell us a thing about what happens. They challenge each other? Like every character ever written challenges another character somehow? And then in the end they have new lives? What are their old lives? What are their new?

I think, like Richiev has said, you've got a grand story you want to tell, but this logline is a long way off, and it doesn't paint a very clear picture about what the film would be about.