In search of her origins, a confused young woman learns her father may have been a Decorated War Vet, however not from earth, now she finds herself in a fight to survive against a relentless alien warrior and a greedy corporation after her unique DNA

It definitely needs to be shorter, although it is an interesting concept there is far too much in there for a concise logline.

As for the concept itself it seems like a huge jump from digging around on ancestry.com to alien warriors after her. If she only found out now how would they know about her and why haven't they come for her sooner? Just a thought to make the timeline a little clearer, otherwise really good job!

It definitely needs to be shorter, although it is an interesting concept there is far too much in there for a concise logline.

As for the concept itself it seems like a huge jump from digging around on ancestry.com to alien warriors after her. If she only found out now how would they know about her and why haven't they come for her sooner? Just a thought to make the timeline a little clearer, otherwise really good job!

So, the female protagonist is technically a hybrid. ?She is the beneficiary of hybrid vigor -- she exhibits desirable traits greater than the sum of the parent species -- genetic synergism. ?So the offspring of humans who are cross-bred with aliens results in ?uber-warriors, better fighters than any that can be bred within the species, homo sapiens.

What's in it for the aliens? ?What do they gain by cross-breeding with humans that they can't get by intrabreeding?

Are both species trying to breed a superior warrior hybrid?

And if so, why would the alien want to kill the protagonist? Get a sample of her blood, yes. ?Take her captive as a human guinea pig, yes, for further evaluation and testing for?their breeding program. ?But kill her outright? ?It seems to me she's too valuable of a specimen to wantonly kill.

It seems to me that the stakes for her is not her life directly or immediately -- but her freedom. ?Both species want to exploit her as a guinea pig for their own malevolent purposes.

I'm try to understand what the stakes are for both species, why they both want to get a hold of her. What her (involuntary) role is in their plots.

One thing I am fairly certain of is that there must be no uncertainty in the logline as to her parentage, her unique genetic makeup. ?The dramatic question is not whether she's a hybrid species but what she must do about being a hybrid species.