Liquid Jim is a screwball comedy about a lonely junk collector who falls for a cautious psychology major with OCD.

Don't include the title of your film IN the actual logline - the title should be presented in addition to the logline. Likewise, the way your logline is written should indicate tone and genre, so you shouldn't explain that it is a screwball comedy. That's more information for the pitch.

So, it's a lonely junk collector who falls for a cautious psychology major with OCD. You've gone full quirkilicious with your characters, which is fine ... but it's not clear what the event is that sets off your story, what the goal of the junk collector is, what the stakes of your story are ... or even why or how these two would connect.

What about the idea that the hoarder has a legal document that the neat freak need but that fuel to an earthquake the document is somewhere under a pile of junk but he can't find it.

Another possibility could be that as part of their psychological therapy they are assigned as buddy and are supposed to help each other. That may stray too close to "Silver Lining Playbook".

After the collapse of his marriage, a meek driving instructor developed compulsive hoarding. As part of a buddy system he now has to help his nemesis: a beautiful woman affected by the compulsive need to clean and tidy things.

There's a show in the uk that may be helpfull, it's called "obsesive compolsive cleaners" it's made by channel 4.
It's about OCD types going into really grubby, or some times people who horde.

From a few shows i've seen, a horder can disguise the fact that well, that you could work with them an never know. An office romance could bloom with neither party being aware of the others disorders. They could easily make up excuses as to why they don't want the other in their home, but up some time, they'll have to let that person in.

A critique of a logline entails the validity or appropriate use of facts.

As I said, I think your core concept has dramatic possibility. I would like to see it fully realized. My personal reaction to the story so far is that the OCD is the more compelling of the 2 characters, the one with the more dramatically interesting complications and problems. Maybe that's because of my experience with them. Be that as it may I can see her stealing every scene she's in. You have potentially rich raw material to work with. fwiw.

I wasn't saying it was. I really don't want this to become an internet flame war over psychological disorders. I'm only here for critiques on my logline, and the girl having PTSD isn't even a definite part of the story, more a thought on what could connect these two characters.

The key phrase in my statement was "For the most part". Of course, many people suffer from symptoms of PTSD. I know. Working in mental health, I engage with them frequently. I also engage with people suffering from OCD which, for the most part, has a distinctly different etiology and symptoms. (Check out the Diagnostic and Statistical Manual of Mental Disorders, 5th Edition, aka:DSM-5)

>>suddenly you can't stop eating all the time.

But that's not OCD. You're construing apples as oranges.

My point is not to get into a pissing contest over definitions. I think your concept has interesting potential as a story IF it remains true to the actual nature of OCD.

I'm sorry, but the research says you're dead wrong. OCD, hoarding, and a multitude of personality disorders spawn from traumatic events; your grandmother dies, and suddenly you can't stop eating all the time. It's very common.

I'm currently to:
"After his girlfriend leaves him, a self-conscious junk hoarder falls for an OCD neat-freak and begins a self-help journey with her; however, when his ex-girlfriend attempts to barrel back into his life, Jim must learn to leave his past behind him before he is driven into relapse."

The desired form is to stay in the same thread to sustain the dialogue.

>>I don't like the road trip idea really.

Okay, but the take away from the road trip plot gimmick is that it gives them a common objective goal (like they both must reach San Francisco by a certain date. Or else.) So what a the common objective goal that binds them together in spite of their clashing lifestyles and psychological hangups?

>>as they both have compulsive disorders brought on by loss of a loved one,

Sorry, but that just doesn't ring true. For the most part, people suffer from OCD independent of their life experience. That is, it arises organically, as the outcome of the roll of genetic and biochemical dice. The notion that there must be some past traumatic experience to explain every present mental condition has given way to the realization that for many disorders, life's a crap shot.

I think there's been substantial change and I've found a way to incorporate a lot more of what's going on; more than mostly the incident. Is starting a new thread for a major revision bad form around here?

Jim is a hoarder, I guess that's a better descriptor than junk collector? As far as keepin them together, I understand what you're saying, and you're right, I'm just not sure where to go with it. I don't like the road trip idea really. There of course will end up being a lot of play with "needle in their eye/log in your own" as they both have compulsive disorders brought on by loss of a loved one, but she will naturally see his as an issue, and hers not so much. Or should that roll be reversed since Jim is the lead?

Maybe the man should be a hoarder. That would drive a woman with OCD crazy.

The question; what's keeping them together?

Here is Romance in a nutshell:

The Romance: is what keeps the two leads in the story apart.
The Chemistry: is what keeps the two leads in the story together
The inner turmoil: Is what makes the story compelling. (If you do the Romance and the Chemistry correct, it gives birth to inner turmoil)

Many times, what keeps a couple together in a movie is a road trip. They are forced together.

In your logline I am not seeing what's keeping a man who loves junk and a woman with OCD together.

Just curious

I believe the main irony of the story isn't quite conveyed, How about this.
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"When a Junk connoisseur falls for a compulsive neat freak, he must choose between the lifestyle he loves or the woman of his dreams."
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Anyway, you have set up a great conflict. A man who collects junk and a woman with OCD who needs everything to be clean and in it's correct place.

hope that helped, good luck with this!