Spoiled rich girl spends to much on her daddy’s credit card and is forced to get a job to pay off the debt. While working she falls in love with a coworker who shows her the value of a dollar.

the love story is a nice offshoot/benefit of her working hard!

Another thought: Spice the story line up with not only a ticking clock (deadline) but a rival whom initially seems more worthy of the trust fund, but come to find out is a two-faced scoundrel.

fwiw.

Another thought: Spice the story line up with not only a ticking clock (deadline) but a rival whom initially seems more worthy of the trust fund, but come to find out is a two-faced scoundrel.

fwiw.

I didn't think of that but will run with both of them and see where it takes me.

Why not both?

Why not both?

i was doing some thinking and i going to rewrite the logline as i am thinking of going into a different direction with this. I am thinking that instead of getting a job to back back a debt she she has to egt the job before she is allowed to get her father fortune since he just passed away. I needs some work but will add it once it is done thansk so much for the reviews

But that's a different story; she becomes the victim instead of the perpetrator of her own predicament.

What Richiev said: the "B" story may be essential for the story, but it's incidental for the purpose of the logline.

But that's a different story; she becomes the victim instead of the perpetrator of her own predicament.

What Richiev said: the "B" story may be essential for the story, but it's incidental for the purpose of the logline.