When a close-knit farming village in the Lake District is devastated by foot and mouth disease, it falls to one woman and a mysterious Indian newcomer to save her family and restore hope to the community. Based on a true story.

Perfect, thank you.? I think that's as good as it can be for the moment. You've been a big help -- thanks for taking the time.

Maybe something like:

After an English farming village must slaughter its beloved dairy cows to contain a devastating disease, a local woman hires an Indian artist to help her grieving community recover.
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Note: "her grieving community" rather than "the grieving community" -- implicitly underscoring her emotional and familial ties to the village.

Maybe something like:

After an English farming village must slaughter its beloved dairy cows to contain a devastating disease, a local woman hires an Indian artist to help her grieving community recover.
(29 words)

Note: "her grieving community" rather than "the grieving community" -- implicitly underscoring her emotional and familial ties to the village.

Thank you -- yes, "recruits" would be accurate and much stronger than "joins forces". So would "hires".

Based upon your statement? "she is responsible for bringing the Indian to the village", I suggest that? "joins forces with an Indian artist" needs to be reworded to be more forceful, needs to clearly convey that as the protagonist, she is proactive.? ?Is it accurate to say she "recruits" him?

>>> beloved dairy cows

I grew up in a rural community, worked on dairy farms, went on cattle drives. So I understand the bonds that dairymen and cattlemen develop for their livestock even though their animals are destined later or sooner for the slaughterhouse. (I got emotionally involved with the swine -- what can I say? I felt sorry and outraged that such an intelligent animal was forced to live confined in its own filth.)

Anyway,? what I mean to to say is that I'm not sure city slickers will appreciate that dimension of the story from reading the logline.? ?And maybe it doesn't matter.

Regards

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Based upon your statement? "she is responsible for bringing the Indian to the village", I suggest that? "joins forces with an Indian artist" needs to be reworded to be more forceful, needs to clearly convey that as the protagonist, she is proactive.? ?Is it accurate to say she "recruits" him?

>>> beloved dairy cows

I grew up in a rural community, worked on dairy farms, went on cattle drives. So I understand the bonds that dairymen and cattlemen develop for their livestock even though their animals are destined later or sooner for the slaughterhouse. (I got emotionally involved with the swine -- what can I say? I felt sorry and outraged that such an intelligent animal was forced to live confined in its own filth.)

Anyway,? what I mean to to say is that I'm not sure city slickers will appreciate that dimension of the story from reading the logline.? ?And maybe it doesn't matter.

Regards

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