When a jilted bachelorette seeking revenge accidentally hits a pedestrian, she refuses to forget her schemes, despite the fact the pedestrian is actually herself

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Walked in front of my eyes

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Former member · Legend · 114,968 pts

I'm totally confused. The logline seems to setup a story about a character suffering a split personality. But I'm not sure. And if it is about a character with a split personality, I don't know what plot arises from that character flaw.

dogger · Legend · 87,055 pts

I'm totally confused. The logline seems to setup a story about a character suffering a split personality. But I'm not sure. And if it is about a character with a split personality, I don't know what plot arises from that character flaw.

Frugal Writer · Penpusher · 240 pts

Something seems to be implied in this logline that is missing. "When a woman hits herself in an auto accident" implies a hook of some kind but it is unclear and missing context, which leads to confusion.

Plus an MC "seeking revenge" is harder to root for, in general, than an MC seeking a clearing stated goal.