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Crime College (no title yet)
Perhaps,
Your intentions of adding plot thickeners, in my mind, add confusion. Best to simplify it to a single clear sequence of events.
What is his single goal? What are the stakes? The notion of keeping some of his actions secret form some of the characters and some of not shouldn't be in the logline at all. Let that develop as a derivative of a well constructed plot in the outline or treatment.
Why doesn't he want to let the people whom he works for and with know he's enrolled?
What is the purpose of his "balancing act"; that is, what is his objective goal?
What's at stake: what does he stand to gain if he succeeds? What will he lose if he fails?
And what's the genre? A cop/crime comedy or a cop/crime drama?
Why doesn't he want to let the people whom he works for and with know he's enrolled?
What is the purpose of his "balancing act"; that is, what is his objective goal?
What's at stake: what does he stand to gain if he succeeds? What will he lose if he fails?
And what's the genre? A cop/crime comedy or a cop/crime drama?
The line "He will have to play a balancing act" doesn't really tell us anything and should be dropped.
When a rookie undercover officer mistakenly finds himself admitted to a college that trains criminals, he will have to prove he's one of the guys.? -possibly add- (If he's to discover the mastermind behind the school)
Hope that helps, good luck with this!
When a rookie police officer finds himself admitted to a college that trains criminals, he will have to play a balancing act in order to both hide his situation from his superiors and prove he is one of the guys.?
I think it would be way more interesting if his superiors know nothing about what's going on but they are investigating the college and the protagonist is on the team that's investigating the college. That way he has to balance being a student and learning and befriending all these criminals and at the same time trying to not give himself away to the other police officers.
