When an amenable young man gets cold feet on the eve of his wedding, he incurs the wrath of his jilted bride’s unhinged family and is forced to literally fight for his freedom.

Thank you for your reply! I also wondered about the word ?amenable?, it was between that and ?spineless?. Maybe ?spineless? works better? To give you some background on my script, the protagonist lives in a small town, is sheltered (by his over-bearing mother), submissive (to his narcissistic fiance) and intimidated (by his red-neck in-laws). What he really wants to do is travel and enjoy life before he settles down. Instead of voicing this desire, our protagonist leaves his bride-zilla at the alter and tries to skip town (thus incurring her family's wrath). In the end, he learns to stop running and stand up for himself (by having a Hot Fuzz style shoot out, naturally!) The final scene sees our hero wandering the streets of Paris having the time of his life.

Thank you for your reply! I also wondered about the word 'amenable', it was between that and 'spineless'. Maybe 'spineless' works better? To give you some background on my script, the protagonist lives in a small town, is sheltered (by his over-bearing mother), submissive (to his narcissistic fiance) and intimidated (by his red-neck in-laws). What he really wants to do is travel and enjoy life before he settles down. Instead of voicing this desire, our protagonist leaves his bride-zilla at the alter and tries to skip town (thus incurring her family's wrath). In the end, he learns to stop running and stand up for himself (by having a Hot Fuzz style shoot out, naturally!) The final scene sees our hero wandering the streets of Paris having the time of his life.

I love the concept, but if it's a comedy, the logline has to be/should be/ strongly suggested to be/ funny. As it reads now, it's a bit more serious sounding.

I would inject some irony here as well, playing off the terms "cold feet" or "jilted", or even the shotgun wedding theme.

"After backing out of his wedding, a wimpy schoolteacher gets a lesson on love in Appalachia- taught to him by the bride's family, from the end of double barrels."

Yes, it's an action/comedy and the violence leans more towards slapstick, ie. the hero gets into a Jackie Chan/Rush Hour style martial arts fight with his groomsmen. You could be right about adding/changing some keywords to really hammer home the tone of the script though. Thanks for the comments!

Glad to see from your note below the title that you are planning this as an action/comedy. I agree with the previous comment that that would make the most sense for this movie. The irony in the story idea is a lot of fun. You have made a clear, concise statement with your logline. I wonder about the word "amenable." How does that progress your idea? What is it about this character that will need to change in order for him to be able to "fight" for his freedom? Is he meek? Is he hen-pecked? I think what interests me most is what happens when the young man has gone through whatever ordeals you have designed for him to fight for his freedom. Has he changed and realized he loves the bride after all? Do they get married? Obviously this is beyond the scope of a logline but I'm always excited when I read a logline and it makes me want to know more.

Is this intended as a straight- up action movie, or more of an action-comedy thing? Cause it seems to very much relate to the latter, and I personally think that's the best direction to go with it. I quite like this one, sounds like it would be a lot of fun to watch, depending on which way you go with it. Is it a super-violent flick or more of a slapstick action? I feel like there could be a keyword or two in here that answered these questions a bit more - OR that it could play around with expectations for either.