by Knightrider · Maestro · 3,370 pts
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Or tease the audience with an "Inception"-like ending. And whet their appetite for a sequel or 2 or 3 that finally resolves the ambiguity. Maybe that's the protagonist's quest, to find out if he's acting out of his own free will or if he's only a puppet. And if the latter, how can he liberate his consciousness from the technology -- and liberate humanity?
As I said I like the underlying premise, but I am not sure that the logline conveys a glimpse of a plot that delivers on the promise of that premise. I can envision story lines going in several directions. But it's your story, so you have to figure out which one you want to explore. Best wishes.
Or tease the audience with an "Inception"-like ending. And whet their appetite for a sequel or 2 or 3 that finally resolves the ambiguity. Maybe that's the protagonist's quest, to find out if he's acting out of his own free will or if he's only a puppet. And if the latter, how can he liberate his consciousness from the technology -- and liberate humanity?
As I said I like the underlying premise, but I am not sure that the logline conveys a glimpse of a plot that delivers on the promise of that premise. I can envision story lines going in several directions. But it's your story, so you have to figure out which one you want to explore. Best wishes.
Yep, I think maybe at the midpoint or 3rd act would be a good time to at least raise the possibility the the whole time he has been on his mission he may have been controlled all along, then can set up a scene where he'll have a choice to believe that the last 48 hours since the shooting he has been in control or accept that he "never woke up" so to speak and has been under the control of someone since the shooting and all he's been through has been the result of someone hacking his mind.
It'll be great to play up both sides and kinda give that Sophie's choice element at the end.
