When an Iwi investor whanagungatanga is threatened, he must relinquish his fears at a maximum personal cost and risk to encounter a spiritual revelation that awakens his true identity in God.

I just want to say that I have learnt so much from all your reviews.? I am happy to submit this log line to the next part of my project of writing a screenplay for my feature film. This has been an excellent opportunity to do this. Thank you all again for your time and professional experience.??Bye for now!

After a mental breakdown a young Maori corporate?leaves the wealth and returns home to the land of his spiritual roots, to re-discover that he must never abandon his cultural identity. ?

Thank you for your response. I will make that change.

Pazz,

Avoid mentioning your protagonist by name unless he/she is a historical figure. You need to briefly describe instead.

After a mental breakdown, a _____? abandons his fortune in order to return home to the land of his spiritual roots.

Hi

?After Joshua suffers a mental breakdown, he returns to his tribe, where his faith is tested. He must give up his ignorance to activate his genealogy that was lost, when his ancestors became Christians.?

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?After Joshua suffers a breakdown he returns to his tribe, where his faith is tested. He must explore a spiritual life that activates his identity in and through his culture and genealogy.?

I admire and identify with your resolve. However, no amount of tenacity or good intentions can change the truth, and I must refer you to the previous comments given to you on this thread as they almost all still apply. I encourage you to also read the 'Formula' tab and study other posts on this site.

All the best.

Hi.

I really believe I am getting closer to conquering this logline. I am so appreciative of this review thread. This is a excellent challenge for me to breakthrough and have a logline that I need for the reader to understand.? Otherwise the other alternative would be to give up...?? Nah! I will keep going.!!? Lol

"After Joshua breakdown he returns to his tribe, where his faith is tested. He must?explore a spiritual life that activates his identity in and through his culture and genealogy."