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  1. Posted: January 25, 2014In: Public

    After a former star witness is kidnapped by an escaped (or exonerated) killer she must find a way to stop him as he hunts down the jury members who convicted him.

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    Added an answer on January 25, 2014 at 10:38 am

    I have a flaw and a subplot set in place. I won't touch too much into the subplot, but it does deal with her developing a track record of dishonesty. It does hurt the sympathy the character can gain, but she's still kidnapped by a maniac on a killing spree. She will have to overcome her dishonesty iRead more

    I have a flaw and a subplot set in place. I won’t touch too much into the subplot, but it does deal with her developing a track record of dishonesty. It does hurt the sympathy the character can gain, but she’s still kidnapped by a maniac on a killing spree. She will have to overcome her dishonesty in the story, because it’s crucial to both the subplot and main plot. Regardless, here’s what I have now:

    “After an unreliable former star witness is kidnapped by an exonerated convict, she must stop him as he hunts down the jury who convicted him a decade ago.”

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  2. Posted: January 25, 2014In: Public

    After a former star witness is kidnapped by an escaped (or exonerated) killer she must find a way to stop him as he hunts down the jury members who convicted him.

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    Added an answer on January 25, 2014 at 8:41 am

    Thank You! I've been in need of feedback so I can try to write, because I am not above help! The brackets are because I'm not sure if it should be escaped or exonerated. If exonerated I vision the witness to be somewhat unreliable and have misidentified him for a murder she witnessed. With out her iRead more

    Thank You! I’ve been in need of feedback so I can try to write, because I am not above help! The brackets are because I’m not sure if it should be escaped or exonerated. If exonerated I vision the witness to be somewhat unreliable and have misidentified him for a murder she witnessed. With out her identification it would’ve been a circumstantial case.

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  3. Posted: November 4, 2013In: Public

    A father / son mortician team try to uncover the cause of death on a Jane Doe. The more they uncover, the more mysterious and terrifying their world becomes.

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    Added an answer on January 20, 2014 at 1:17 pm

    I like it, but just say the more terrifying it becomes. Mystery is implied already with it being A Jane Doe.

    I like it, but just say the more terrifying it becomes. Mystery is implied already with it being A Jane Doe.

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