1. Posted: October 8, 2013In:

    When the Imperial head chef is beheaded for serving uninventive dishes, the sous chef must obtain a magic cookbook in order to execute a dish pleasing to the Emperor before he and his staff are beheaded.

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    Thanks for volunteering your thoughts dpg. Really helpful!

    Thanks for volunteering your thoughts dpg. Really helpful!

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  2. Posted: October 8, 2013In:

    When the Imperial head chef is beheaded for serving uninventive dishes, the sous chef must obtain a magic cookbook in order to execute a dish pleasing to the Emperor before he and his staff are beheaded.

    andrewclau Logliner

    Another revision - removing the midpoint entirely from the logline: When his predecessor is beheaded for serving an uninspired menu, he must hunt down a rare species of Phoenix to execute a special recipe before the Emperor?s fortnightly banquet, or face the chopping block himself.? Still a bit messRead more

    Another revision – removing the midpoint entirely from the logline:

    When his predecessor is beheaded for serving an uninspired menu, he must hunt down a rare species of Phoenix to execute a special recipe before the Emperor?s fortnightly banquet, or face the chopping block himself.?

    Still a bit messy but again, just trying to make sure the elements are in place.

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  3. Posted: October 8, 2013In:

    When the Imperial head chef is beheaded for serving uninventive dishes, the sous chef must obtain a magic cookbook in order to execute a dish pleasing to the Emperor before he and his staff are beheaded.

    andrewclau Logliner

    Regarding the phoenix - the creature is still an answer outside of himself. So the phoenix escaping will force him to get inventive.

    Regarding the phoenix – the creature is still an answer outside of himself. So the phoenix escaping will force him to get inventive.

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