1. Posted: July 28, 2015In:

    A cunning serial predator lures a stranded schoolgirl back to his den, where he tries to make her a pawn in his sadistic game, or, can she outplay him?

    Az Penpusher

    I think you've missed some of the rewrites, as it appears you are referring to the first post.

    I think you’ve missed some of the rewrites, as it appears you are referring to the first post.

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  2. Posted: July 27, 2015In:

    Twenty years after the horrific slaying of a family, terrified townsfolk wait in fear for the imminent return of the menacing monster that was put away for the crime.

    Az Penpusher

    Here's another rewrite: 'A brooding convicted killer sets off to a town, seeking vengeance against those responsible for putting him away years ago, with news of this the fearful townsfolk turn to their unyielding clan leader who takes drastic action to protect them and stop their old nemesis.'

    Here’s another rewrite:

    ‘A brooding convicted killer sets off to a town, seeking vengeance against those responsible for putting him away years ago, with news of this the fearful townsfolk turn to their unyielding clan leader who takes drastic action to protect them and stop their old nemesis.’

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  3. Posted: July 27, 2015In:

    Twenty years after the horrific slaying of a family, terrified townsfolk wait in fear for the imminent return of the menacing monster that was put away for the crime.

    Az Penpusher

    I mentioned monster once plus he was jailed so I think it's pretty clear he is a man, though call him a monster for the crime he was convicted for. Hope that explains it to you better.

    I mentioned monster once plus he was jailed so I think it’s pretty clear he is a man, though call him a monster for the crime he was convicted for. Hope that explains it to you better.

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