1. Posted: June 21, 2013In:

    As A test subject escapes the clutches of a pharmaceutical giant. Using her powers she must rescue her lover and defeat a patient who's power exceeds her own, her brother.

    Andrew Bates Logliner

    "When a human guinea pig escapes the clutches of a pharmaceutical giant. The company send out their most elite test subjects to eradicate the problem, her family"

    “When a human guinea pig escapes the clutches of a pharmaceutical
    giant. The company send out their most elite test subjects to eradicate the problem,
    her family”

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  2. Posted: June 21, 2013In:

    As A test subject escapes the clutches of a pharmaceutical giant. Using her powers she must rescue her lover and defeat a patient who's power exceeds her own, her brother.

    Andrew Bates Logliner

    Hey guys Thank you for the input, will work on it.

    Hey guys

    Thank you for the input, will work on it.

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  3. Posted: June 17, 2013In:

    A peasant becomes soldier and decides to go to war in Sahara and fights alone because a man of authority snatches his first love. Rejected by death, a ghost suddenly appears to him, just to advise him to leave his place to find another love. When meets her ,both decide to get married but confronted by fierce and unpitiful rapist .

    Andrew Bates Logliner

    I agree with Tony. The logline is to long and very cluttered. In a logline focus on one protagonist and one Antagonist ( ...the Man of Authority and the fierce rapist...that's two) What are the hero's flaws? (apart from being a peasant) As a guide keep your logline from 24-28 words. Good luck.

    I agree with Tony.
    The logline is to long and very cluttered.
    In a logline focus on one protagonist and one Antagonist ( …the Man of Authority and the fierce rapist…that’s two)
    What are the hero’s flaws? (apart from being a peasant)
    As a guide keep your logline from 24-28 words.

    Good luck.

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