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After their town is invaded by the undead, it's up to a group of local video gamers to use the skills they've learned playing, Zombie Death Kill, to save their community from the Zombie Apocalypse.
Hey Richiev What a great idea! Just a few points... *With the logline, focus on one person instead of a group. Who is he/she, their faults, something to overcome etc (By focusing on one person, gives the reader someone to cheer for etc, kinda hard with a group, to many faces etc (ref logline only) *Read more
Hey Richiev
What a great idea!
Just a few points…
*With the logline, focus on one person instead of a group. Who is he/she, their faults, something to overcome etc
(By focusing on one person, gives the reader someone to cheer for etc, kinda hard with a group, to many faces etc (ref logline only)
*Try to keep the logline to 25-27 Words – This is a guideline, anything under 30 is good.
* “Zombie”, try not to use the same word twice.
*They’re gamers, I’m sure they’ve played more than one zombie game. Take out “Zombie Death Kill” unless this game title is a dramatic part of the story? If so keep it in.
*In my opinion don’t use the the word “invade”, maybe overrun, taken over…use more powerful words!
My spin…
“After their town is swarmed by the undead, a timid video gamer and his friends must unite and use their skills to save themselves from the Zombie hoard” (28 words)
Something like that, but better!
See lessBest of luck, would love to read the script!!
An Animal Psychologist fakes a coma to honor his departed wife's final request of bringing their estranged kids home for Christmas.
I like the idea, but this logline leaves to many questions (I agree with kriss) The protagonist should always be on the move, doing something....It'll be hard and boring to watch if he's doing nothing but laying in a bed faking a coma for the entire movie? (Which I doubt is your story, but that is hRead more
I like the idea, but this logline leaves to many questions (I agree with kriss)
The protagonist should always be on the move, doing something….It’ll be hard and boring to watch if he’s doing nothing but laying in a bed faking a coma for the entire movie? (Which I doubt is your story, but that is how it reads)
Will we be watching him plan the coma? Is anyone else on board with this hoax? Tell us in the logline if so.
It’ll be interesting to see how you would spin this. As I said earlier, like the idea.
Best of luck
See lessWhen a Demon kidnaps his fiance, a timid janitor must uncover his past and locate a mythical artifact that encases the power of a god.
If the janitor fails to get the artifact the demon will kill his fiance. Will re-word, thanks.
If the janitor fails to get the artifact the demon will kill his fiance. Will re-word, thanks.
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