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An ethics prof and family man must prove his rehabilitation to a court-appointed psychiatrist when found not guilty of rape by reason of insanity and committed to a mental asylum.
Thanks harry for your honest feedback. 1. I am aware of that. Still trying to make it work :) 2. I am thinking about changing it to "a morally superior" ethics professor and I thought the depressive psychiatrist would make for some good irony, but you're right, vengeful offers more conflict. 3. moraRead more
Thanks harry for your honest feedback.
1. I am aware of that. Still trying to make it work 🙂
See less2. I am thinking about changing it to “a morally superior” ethics professor and I thought the depressive psychiatrist would make for some good irony, but you’re right, vengeful offers more conflict.
3. morally superior works better here and is also more the kind of arc that I have in mind. He starts out thinking that he is in perfect control of his life and couldn’t possibly make a “mistake,” but learns that he’s flawed like the rest.
4. What if a neurological condition was the reason for his transgression? Would that make it at least relatable to you?
An ethics prof and family man must prove his rehabilitation to a court-appointed psychiatrist when found not guilty of rape by reason of insanity and committed to a mental asylum.
Hi Richiev. Thanks for your honest feedback. You are pointing out an issue that I see as well. Somehow I am drawn to writing antiheroes, but making them likeable or at least relatable is always an issue and I see why a rapist wouldn't get much of that. What crime do you think would get more sympathyRead more
Hi Richiev. Thanks for your honest feedback. You are pointing out an issue that I see as well. Somehow I am drawn to writing antiheroes, but making them likeable or at least relatable is always an issue and I see why a rapist wouldn’t get much of that. What crime do you think would get more sympathy while still putting him into the position of requiring mental rehab? I can’t really think of anything…murder isn’t really better. The initial idea came to me when I read about a man suffering from a brain tumour who began fantasising about raping his secretary. That is also the reason for the temporary insanity of my character. Not sure how to build this into the longline as it gets too complicated…
See lessThe worlds two worst explorers sign themselves up for a tour of the Pyramids of Giza, only to them be trapped inside with a carpet salesman, a dentist, a phone salesman and the Pharaoh.
Basically you have devoted the entire longline to two things: the main characters and the inciting incident. The most important point is their intention over the course of the script. I suppose it's getting out of there. What could help to make this longline more appealing is to add some stakes andRead more
Basically you have devoted the entire longline to two things: the main characters and the inciting incident. The most important point is their intention over the course of the script. I suppose it’s getting out of there. What could help to make this longline more appealing is to add some stakes and maybe a in impending clock that forces them to act fast. Also, are the people trapped inside maybe trying to stop them from getting out somehow, or are they all on their sides? Maybe one of these characters has reasons of their own not to let anybody get out of there?
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