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A megalomaniac businessmann plots to overthrow the king, but only an abused poor blind orphaned boy can stop him
Dear Benneth, Reading your synopsis, I am convinced that the "abused poor blind orphaned boy" is the lead character. If so, you need something like this: An ill-fated blind boy and his fairy guardian must help break the curse that is spelled by an egoistic businessman who plots to overthrow the kingRead more
Dear Benneth,
Reading your synopsis, I am convinced that the “abused poor blind orphaned boy” is the lead character. If so, you need something like this:
An ill-fated blind boy and his fairy guardian must help break the curse that is spelled by an egoistic businessman who plots to overthrow the kingdom and become a king.
I hope this helps.
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Twin sisters separated at birth and raised by their parents in different social strata meet again and respond to the great contradictions of their lives. Can your environment change who you are?
Hi colibricubano, To me, this sounds more like an unedited version of a movie tag than a logline. I suggest you finalize your lead character first, then the major event, and finally the action. You can introduce a Stake. Follow the formula below and re-write your logline. the CHARACTER/POV: describeRead more
Hi colibricubano,
To me, this sounds more like an unedited version of a movie tag than a logline. I suggest you finalize your lead character first, then the major event, and finally the action. You can introduce a Stake. Follow the formula below and re-write your logline.
the CHARACTER/POV: describe sociology/function and psychology/behaviour.
the MAJOR EVENT: this is the inciting incident, the call to adventure, catalyst etc.
the ACTION/GOAL: describe what the MC tries to achieve for most of the story.
Optional inclusions
the STAKES: for high concept stories, the stakes are implied in the basic logline
the OBSTACLE/ANTAGONIST: often part of the Action, or suggested by the Event
the HERO’S FLAW: this will express the theme and character journey/transformation.
I hope this helps.
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A neuropsychologist must use an experimental technology that allows her to enter the minds of her patients in order to save a severely abused woman in a coma, but when inexplicable and frightening things begin happening in her real life, she realizes she must save herself or risk losing her own sanity.
A female neuropsychologist who uses experimental technology to save a patient in a coma realizes she must save her own sanity as she begins to experience inexplicable and terrifying moments in her own life.
A female neuropsychologist who uses experimental technology to save a patient in a coma realizes she must save her own sanity as she begins to experience inexplicable and terrifying moments in her own life.
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