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    When a young man converts to Islam for the love of a girl, he finds his life thrown into chaos when the mentor he befriended ends up being a terrorist, intent on bombing a train -with him omboard.

    Benneth Logliner

    Just did a new rewrite.: "Determined to please his excommunicated Muslim fiancee, a young man converts to Islam, winds up with a ruthless terrorist as mentor and finds himself in a train with a bomb, he must disarm it before it kills the passengers"

    Just did a new rewrite.:
    “Determined to please his excommunicated Muslim fiancee, a young man converts to Islam, winds up with a ruthless terrorist as mentor and finds himself in a train with a bomb, he must disarm it before it kills the passengers”

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    When a young man converts to Islam for the love of a girl, he finds his life thrown into chaos when the mentor he befriended ends up being a terrorist, intent on bombing a train -with him omboard.

    Benneth Logliner

    Thanks dpg for the research. What the MC is going to do is to offer his own life to save others. ?When he fails to get rid of the bomb or stop the train because of the panic in the train, he evacuates the passengers into other wagons and ends up alone in a wagon with the bomb. He plans to leave theRead more

    Thanks dpg for the research. What the MC is going to do is to offer his own life to save others. ?When he fails to get rid of the bomb or stop the train because of the panic in the train, he evacuates the passengers into other wagons and ends up alone in a wagon with the bomb. He plans to leave the bomb there and get out, but at the last second, a 4 years old kid runs into the wagon. MC realizes that he can not make it out without the kid getting killed, so he takes the bomb on himself to reduce the impact and as such save the kid and the passengers.

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  3. Posted: May 25, 2016In:

    When a young man converts to Islam for the love of a girl, he finds his life thrown into chaos when the mentor he befriended ends up being a terrorist, intent on bombing a train -with him omboard.

    Benneth Logliner

    Thanks dpg for taking time to do the research. What the protagonist will do is to save the lives of the passengers by offering his own life. When he fails to get rid of the bomb or stop the train because of the panic that breaks out on the knowledge?of the bomb. The MC takes following actions: he geRead more

    Thanks dpg for taking time to do the research. What the protagonist will do is to save the lives of the passengers by offering his own life. When he fails to get rid of the bomb or stop the train because of the panic that breaks out on the knowledge?of the bomb. The MC takes following actions: he gets the passengers to move into other wagons and ends up alone in one with the bomb. He plans to leave the bomb there but a 4 years old kid runs into the wagon just at the last second. MC realizes he can not make it out without the boy getting killed, so he uses his body to reduce the impact of the bomb to save the boy and of course the rest of the passengers.

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