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After being framed for assault, an indigenous basketballer from the Australian outback, must prove himself innocent before his scholarship to play for a college in the USA expires.
I know there's two sets of stakes here. The threat of imprisonment and losing the opportunity to play the big leagues. Is this a bad thing story wise or does it just make it more dramatic? This character has a lot of back story which I felt unnecessary to expose in the logline. To cut it as short asRead more
I know there’s two sets of stakes here. The threat of imprisonment and losing the opportunity to play the big leagues. Is this a bad thing story wise or does it just make it more dramatic? This character has a lot of back story which I felt unnecessary to expose in the logline.
See lessTo cut it as short as possible her goes; as a boy Jake spent 8 years on the run with his father who stole him from his mother and ‘went bush’. There he learns hard bush skills taught by his father and an amazing ability to play basketball as they camped near a large farm house where the owners had there own court. Jake played daily when the owners of the farmhouse left each morning. His old man coached him. The kid is good…
His father was eventually caught and shot dead and Jake was sent to foster homes where he didn’t fit in and eventually assaulted someone sending Jake to do some time in juvenile prison. Now that he’s released he has an opportunity to turn his life around. If he goes back inside this time it won’t be juvenile detention but the big house as he turns 18 not long after being released.
My apologies for the long back story but if the above logline doesn’t work I’m open to suggestions.
BTW the story begins with MC being released from Juvi. All back story will be unravelled throughout the script.
Shoot straight… As I know you do.
An indigenous ward of the state is released from juvenile prison and fostered to a reputable white family who threaten to lie to his parole officer and get him incarcerated, unless he helps them with a heist.
You both raise good points thank you.
You both raise good points thank you.
See lessAn indigenous ward of the state is released from juvenile prison and fostered to a reputable white family who threaten to lie to his parole officer and get him incarcerated, unless he helps them with a heist.
This is a review of a previous logline.
This is a review of a previous logline.
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