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When a time travelling cover-band frontman steals hits before they're famous, his musical idol descends into a suicidal depression and to save his life he must overcome his lust for fame.
Again, in this logline the conflict feels just internal. Like the MC just needs to get over himself and then the idol will be fine. I;m sure it's not that simple in the story but that's how it feels in the logline. He's ruined someone's life, what does he need to DO to fix it? I'd figure out a way tRead more
Again, in this logline the conflict feels just internal. Like the MC just needs to get over himself and then the idol will be fine. I;m sure it’s not that simple in the story but that’s how it feels in the logline. He’s ruined someone’s life, what does he need to DO to fix it?
I’d figure out a way to get the II back in there, we NEED to know why the story starts.. “Why is today different than the rest?”
This is still too long but maybe something in here will help…
See less“When a frustrated cover-band musician loses his only gig he jumps back in time to take the spotlight away from his musical idol, who will take his own like unless the time traveler intervenes, giving up his new found fame. “
When a meticulous hitman kills the wrong target, he has only two hours to figure out who betrayed him before the Mob takes its brutal revenge.
I agree. After reading all your versions this one really hits it home. Great job!
I agree. After reading all your versions this one really hits it home. Great job!
See lessUnable to afford the support payments to maintain joint custody of his son, a puritan leather worker is forced to cater to the underground S&M market in his country town.
Why can't he afford the payments now? What happened? Is the divorce recent? Or did something happen to reduce his business? Lose his biggest client? Competitor come to town? The 'I need to provide for my family' is primal and a great motivator for the story but I feel like it needs something specifiRead more
Why can’t he afford the payments now? What happened? Is the divorce recent? Or did something happen to reduce his business? Lose his biggest client? Competitor come to town? The ‘I need to provide for my family’ is primal and a great motivator for the story but I feel like it needs something specific that sets it all in motion.
See lessAnd what is the conflict? Is it all internal due to his beliefs? Is there some focal point like a clergy leader in the town that can embody the conflict?