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  1. Posted: June 30, 2015In: Public

    When a 17 year-old does a work for the dole program at a Sydney Car Wash for a businessman, he becomes entangled into his shady world while his dreams of wrestling at the 2000 Olympic Games becomes more and more distant by the year. Note: This is a TV pilot.

    Caleb Tumanako Logliner
    Added an answer on July 2, 2015 at 7:18 am

    So, it's set in the year 1996. That's the first season. The second season will be 1997. Third 1998 Fourth and final 1999 The stand-over work turns into contract killing, drug dealing etc I am actually wondering whether to change it from wrestling to Judo. The business man is Vietnamese, I want Ahn DRead more

    So, it’s set in the year 1996. That’s the first season.
    The second season will be 1997.
    Third 1998
    Fourth and final 1999

    The stand-over work turns into contract killing, drug dealing etc

    I am actually wondering whether to change it from wrestling to Judo.

    The business man is Vietnamese, I want Ahn Doh for the role.

    So I’m going to write this television pilot. List all the people I want for it and have the protagonist be half Koori, half Australian so he really is an underdog, not only in society but also when he trains.

    Unfortunately, as Ahn Doh’s character manipulates him more and more so, his dreams to win gold become more of a dream as the years progress as he becomes an effective hitman.

    The drugs they are dealing are heroin as Ahn Doh is the head of a Vietnamese/Chinese criminal syndicate for these type of characters. He uses street kids to sell on the street while keeping a happy front at his San Souci car wash place.

    Now, the similarities to Breaking Bad are too much so I have to go back and perhaps change it from a car wash to a car dealership.

    Why cars? Because it’s symbolic of moving heroin or meth, etc.

    There’s going to be some comedy but every season would open up with some type of music from the year prior. It’s set in the 90s and is going to very 90s in clothing, haircuts, attitudes, etc.

    But the tragedy is – we slowly see this kid’s innocence disappear.

    The first episode actually takes place in the last week of 1996.

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  2. Posted: June 30, 2015In: Public

    When a 17 year-old does a work for the dole program at a Sydney Car Wash for a businessman, he becomes entangled into his shady world while his dreams of wrestling at the 2000 Olympic Games becomes more and more distant by the year. Note: This is a TV pilot.

    Caleb Tumanako Logliner
    Added an answer on July 1, 2015 at 12:33 pm

    It's a work for the dole program, he is forced into it. Money, ambition is stopping him. Shady world = stand-over work for a corrupt businessman.

    It’s a work for the dole program, he is forced into it.

    Money, ambition is stopping him.

    Shady world = stand-over work for a corrupt businessman.

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  3. Posted: June 30, 2015In: Public

    When a 17 year-old does a work for the dole program at a Sydney Car Wash for a businessman, he becomes entangled into his shady world while his dreams of wrestling at the 2000 Olympic Games becomes more and more distant by the year. Note: This is a TV pilot.

    Caleb Tumanako Logliner
    Added an answer on June 30, 2015 at 11:01 pm

    Hey Could you please if you're going to critique offer an alternative? The logic is - he is an amatuer wrestler who wants to wrestle at the 2000 Games in Sydney while his boss takes a liking to him and offers him work as a stand-over man in the shady world of Vietnamese crime. "drugs"

    Hey

    Could you please if you’re going to critique offer an alternative?

    The logic is – he is an amatuer wrestler who wants to wrestle at the 2000 Games in Sydney while his boss takes a liking to him and offers him work as a stand-over man in the shady world of Vietnamese crime. “drugs”

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