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A mercenary teams up with a prince to rescue a princess who was kidnapped by her father who is an evil emperor.
- Two childhood friends, including a mercenary and a prince falls in love with each other in space until they decide to stop an evil emperor from having the town being invaded by aliensa mercenary and a prince.. who is your protagonist?'falling in love' should not be confused as the inciting incidenRead more
– Two childhood friends, including a mercenary and a prince falls in love with each other in space until they decide to stop an evil emperor from having the town being invaded by aliens
- a mercenary and a prince.. who is your protagonist?
- ‘falling in love’ should not be confused as the inciting incident.
See lessIt doesn’t bring the story into action. Think of a specific event which makes her go against the emperor
OR think what’s at stake. She’s in outer space, what does she have to lose with this invasion?
A mercenary teams up with a prince to rescue a princess who was kidnapped by her father who is an evil emperor.
Since the objective goal belongs to the emperor's daughter,hence this should be written with her as the protagonistTo invade pertains to intrusive entrance; one must be unearthly, to invade earth.What's standing in her way seems missing. What prevents her from stopping her father?Is the action 'teamRead more
hence this should be written with her as the protagonist
for an emperor’s daughter or the rivalry between these families..? if not, these can be dropped out
Good luck
See lessA young man accepts the body switch offered from a cult member in order to start a run away from his pregnant girlfriend and start a new life. Little did he knows that the new body requires constant supplies of human hearts. Meanwhile, his old body replaced him at home as cult members have their own plans with his girlfriend.
learning that ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? he must his new body needs a? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ?go ask to be returned fresh supply of blood? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ?to his old self the cult members have their? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ?save heRead more
learning that ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? he must
fresh supply of blood? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ?to his old self
own plans with his girlfriend
the first set of inciting incident -> objective goal is what I suggest you go for in the logline-
After realizing that his new body requires an endless supply of fresh blood, a man must seek out the operators to reclaim his old body (25 Words)
The through line with his girlfriend becomes an added complication, to the fact that the cult members are not interested in the re-switch, which is all pretty good for the script,
See lessbut makes the logline harder to read- Returning to reclaim his old body, when a young man learns that his operators are trying to sacrifice his girlfriend, a commitment-phobic man must save her (27 Words) (not recommended)