1. Posted: December 29, 2017In:

    “the sleight of hand”

    variable Uberwriter

    thanks Knightrider for the punchline "magicians never reveal their secrets and this is their biggest one. It truly defogs the premise for me! thanks CraigDGriffiths for putting what I had in mind into the best possible logline! finally, thanks to Dkpough1 for making me aware of the missing goal! forRead more

    thanks Knightrider for the punchline “magicians never reveal their secrets and this is their biggest one. It truly defogs the premise for me!

    thanks CraigDGriffiths for putting what I had in mind into the best possible logline!

    finally, thanks to Dkpough1 for making me aware of the missing goal!
    for your kind efforts for the awesome link!! (Jin v/s Ray)

    the plot could be..
    AFTER his camera is turned into a magical weapon,
    Intrigued he decides to follow the street magician responsible for this anomaly,
    only to confirm his doubts
    And now he must face a small group of wizards who are too keen to reveal their biggest secret!!

    but I am still hung up on him being the active protagonist by giving him a choice and letting him DECIDE how himself to reveal their secret or else______________(don’t know the “stakes” and “debate section” yet)

    all of you got into my head (from such great distances) and unraveled a mess of plot
    awesome 🙂

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  2. Posted: December 26, 2017In:

    pls comment on it

    variable Uberwriter

    Richiev gave me an idea... "When his daughter contracts cancer, a desperate teacher kidnaps her rich student only to discover he knows her and chooses to cooperate instead" reason: he is fed up of his parent's *detrimental ways of spending their money.....he saw a better use *saving a life is certaiRead more

    Richiev gave me an idea…

    “When his daughter contracts cancer, a desperate teacher kidnaps her rich student only to discover he knows her and chooses to cooperate instead”

    reason: he is fed up of his parent’s *detrimental ways of spending their money…..he saw a better use

    *saving a life is certainly better than throwing expensive wine parties

    A conflict could arise when his parents decide not to pay instead ______________
    possibly end into his parents realising their error and with their generous donation, the successful treatment of her daughter

    everybody’s happy

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  3. Posted: December 27, 2017In:

    potential dark thriller “the see saw”

    variable Uberwriter

    "A by the book undercover agent must team up with his mafia informant to prove his innocence after being framed by his former mentor and put the responsible party behind the bars" thanks Richiev for adjective "by the book" and for pointing out his goal more clearly thanks Foxtrot25, even i don't likRead more

    “A by the book undercover agent must team up with his mafia informant to prove his innocence after being framed by his former mentor and put the responsible party behind the bars”

    thanks Richiev for adjective “by the book” and for pointing out his goal more clearly

    thanks Foxtrot25, even i don’t like the title myself (what was I thinking??) can somebody also suggest a title

    finally thanks to CraigDGriffiths for your second suggestion, I chose your answer because your second suggestion seems to fit

    thanks again everyone for such insightful responses

    I love logline.it

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