1. Posted: December 29, 2017In:

    After instructing his viewers to boycott a product a bombastic news anchor is held hostage by a fired employee who is determined to make him pay with his life.

    variable Uberwriter

    If he is "determined to make him pay with his life" and has already "held hostage" what's stopping him from killing our protagonist? If he is a sadist too, than that must be mentioned in the logline or the plot stops there..

    If he is “determined to make him pay with his life”
    and has already “held hostage”
    what’s stopping him from killing our protagonist?

    If he is a sadist too, than that must be mentioned in the logline or the plot stops there..

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  2. Posted: December 29, 2017In:

    “the sleight of hand”

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    variable Uberwriter

    thanks Knightrider for the punchline "magicians never reveal their secrets and this is their biggest one. It truly defogs the premise for me! thanks CraigDGriffiths for putting what I had in mind into the best possible logline! finally, thanks to Dkpough1 for making me aware of the missing goal! forRead more

    thanks Knightrider for the punchline “magicians never reveal their secrets and this is their biggest one. It truly defogs the premise for me!

    thanks CraigDGriffiths for putting what I had in mind into the best possible logline!

    finally, thanks to Dkpough1 for making me aware of the missing goal!
    for your kind efforts for the awesome link!! (Jin v/s Ray)

    the plot could be..
    AFTER his camera is turned into a magical weapon,
    Intrigued he decides to follow the street magician responsible for this anomaly,
    only to confirm his doubts
    And now he must face a small group of wizards who are too keen to reveal their biggest secret!!

    but I am still hung up on him being the active protagonist by giving him a choice and letting him DECIDE how himself to reveal their secret or else______________(don’t know the “stakes” and “debate section” yet)

    all of you got into my head (from such great distances) and unraveled a mess of plot
    awesome 🙂

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  3. Posted: December 29, 2017In:

    Multiple Reality Disorder

    variable Uberwriter

    ..but shouldn't your logline include how retconning history turns out to be a conflict for him some specific stakes would help this awesome concept

    ..but shouldn’t your logline include how retconning history turns out to be a conflict for him
    some specific stakes would help this awesome concept

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