1. Posted: April 24, 2018In:

    ?An advanced alien race threatens to enslave Earth in the 1500?s and humanity?s last hope lies in the unproven inventions of an Italian Renaissance artist who holds a dark secret.?

    variable Uberwriter

    It's not clear whether he's alive or his inventions are being used posthumously. da vinci died in 1519, reading you logline I said to myself "it would be fun to see this guy in some sci-fi action..." My first question is, who is your protagonist? Is it the artist himself or someone he inspired? AlsoRead more

    It’s not clear whether he’s alive or his inventions are being used posthumously. da vinci died in 1519, reading you logline I said to myself “it would be fun to see this guy in some sci-fi action…”

    My first question is, who is your protagonist? Is it the artist himself or someone he inspired?

    Also,
    What are the dark secrets? How does it create the implied conflict?

    Lastly,
    What becomes his GOAL as a result of this alien invasion?

    good luck dho1115

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  2. Posted: April 22, 2018In:

    After accidentally reviving a teenage MUMMY, a young archaeologist must fight the freed DARK FORCES who want the MUMMY to turn evil and cause annihilation.

    variable Uberwriter

    I thought archaeologist was a male to maybe sustain the scope of a relation between themIf 2017 Oscar Winning "the shape of water" can walk away with lovemaking between an underwater creature and a mute girl.... (!!!) It's safe to say you can pull it off with an archaeologist and a young mummy>Read more

    I thought archaeologist was a male to maybe sustain the scope of a relation between them

    If 2017 Oscar Winning “the shape of water” can walk away with lovemaking between an underwater creature and a mute girl…. (!!!) It’s safe to say you can pull it off with an archaeologist and a young mummy

    >>>I don’t want to entertain too many emotions…
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    Why not?

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  3. Posted: April 22, 2018In:

    When a businessman sells up to recover from debilitating injury, he embarks on an apparently simple quest to trace the origin of a family heirloom.

    variable Uberwriter

    After he embarks on his quest (to trace the origin of a family heirloom) what becomes his GOAL?, because it sounds like an inciting incidentThen maybe, ???After selling the family crest to recover from his injuries, a businessman must get it back from an ambitious collector after?he learns it is morRead more

    After he embarks on his quest (to trace the origin of a family heirloom) what becomes his GOAL?

    , because it sounds like an inciting incident

    Then maybe,
    ???After selling the family crest to recover from his injuries, a businessman must get it back from an ambitious collector after?he learns it is more than just a heirloom???

    Good luck RusselIN

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