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The uncategorized mystery cases have brought a spiritual detective to the secret of folk legends. She and her squad will discover a feud between two clans that have survived for thousands years of Vietnamese history.
"When a spiritual detective is brought into an unsolved folk mystery, she discovers a feud between two surviving clans of Vietnam..." some questions pop in head: 1. What do you mean by a spiritual detective? 2. What specifically is this unsolved mystery? 3. What is the secret of the folk legends? 4.Read more
“When a spiritual detective is brought into an unsolved folk mystery, she discovers a feud between two surviving clans of Vietnam…”
some questions pop in head:
1. What do you mean by a spiritual detective?
2. What specifically is this unsolved mystery?
3. What is the secret of the folk legends?
4. What specific visual goal does discovering this feud create for your protagonist?
5. What exactly is the Vietnamese history you are referring to here?
Feel free to reveal your plot (until it messes with the final reveal) and frame it in a logline. Now it would become a long version but from there you can try trimming the unnecessary details.
PS. The “formula tab” on top is really useful.
See lessA loyal husband and his wife have a double date with their two best friends. All goes well until the husband’s strong romantic feelings for his best friends’ girlfriend, who happens to be his ex, show up in the middle of the date. TITLE: Double Trouble
"When his feelings for an ex resurfaces on a double date..." Still why would anybody double date their Ex if their history had the potential of resurfacing? "After being forced by his wife to double date an Ex, his feelings for her reappear..." But you risk a passive protagonist with this version, sRead more
“When his feelings for an ex resurfaces on a double date…”
Still why would anybody double date their Ex if their history had the potential of resurfacing?
“After being forced by his wife to double date an Ex, his feelings for her reappear…”
But you risk a passive protagonist with this version, since he is dragged in Act II by his wife
I get a feeling that you kinda get the logline formula..
I’d suggest you post more loglines to see how it goes
Don’t go missing mrmmr
If you don’t believe me, read the crappy loglines most logliners posted in the beginning of their journey here
See lessWhile yours was a decent enough try..
After her student goes missing, the teacher in-charge sets up a “search and rescue” with his best friends before their field trip ends.
You guys are spot on! The absence of hook is an alarming issue Should I change it into "apparently missing" Allow me to explain myself there... The missing kid (a mischief adventurer type) mentioned to go out looking for a "mcguffin" before vanishing that puts them in a reasonable doubt whether he'sRead more
You guys are spot on!
The absence of hook is an alarming issue
Should I change it into “apparently missing”
Allow me to explain myself there…
The missing kid (a mischief adventurer type) mentioned to go out looking for a “mcguffin” before vanishing
that puts them in a reasonable doubt whether he’s really missing or looking for something
On top of that, he left a paper trail deliberately, which strengthened their doubts that they will find him as always
So they mistake it as a game
It’s only later when they comprehend the idea that he might really be missing and it isn’t another one of his games.
But since this detail pertains to the Mid Point Reversal, should I include it in the logline?
What do you say
Because,
Then the logline becomes a bit clunky
In an extended field trip, when the school brat goes missing, the teacher in-charge assembles his best friends to set out a search and rescue following his paper trail, until it leads them nowhere.
So, does this work any better?
(Thanks Foxtrot25 and dpg)
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