1. Posted: June 21, 2017In:

    Seduced into a world of drugs, sex, and money after abandoning her loved ones, model-slash-actress hopeful must determine if losing herself, is worth it to become a star.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    Sort of works. Just be specific. Remove the ambiguity (hopefully). That is good for marketing,, but you are trying to interest a producer who is a partner in development. They need to know what they are deciding on. There a million scripts, don't make them work to understand your work. Put her aim aRead more

    Sort of works. Just be specific. Remove the ambiguity (hopefully). That is good for marketing,, but you are trying to interest a producer who is a partner in development. They need to know what they are deciding on. There a million scripts, don’t make them work to understand your work.

    Put her aim and her struggles.

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  2. Posted: June 19, 2017In:

    When her occult bookshop is burned down, an angry, self-loathing Witch must stop a secret organisation from murdering powerful witches.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    You have a slight wording issue. You could assume that she knew about the organisation all along. So tie the fire and her discovery together and you are okay. Discovering a plan to kill witches after her occult shop is burnt down a woman must xxxx to save herself and other powerful witches.

    You have a slight wording issue. You could assume that she knew about the organisation all along.

    So tie the fire and her discovery together and you are okay.

    Discovering a plan to kill witches after her occult shop is burnt down a woman must xxxx to save herself and other powerful witches.

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  3. Posted: April 23, 2017In:

    An ordinary biker girl sacrifices her extraordinary corporate career to win her love ; embarks on a solo Motorcycle quest of her inspirational soulmate.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    The only thing I'd add or try to describe is, what does the quest mean? A road trip, entering the competitive circuit?

    The only thing I’d add or try to describe is, what does the quest mean? A road trip, entering the competitive circuit?

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