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When a man’s marriage proposal is curiously rejected, he secretly hires a private investigator to investigate; but when the PI ends up following the wrong girl, the man must learn to differentiate truth from fiction to win his girlfriend back.
You can drop the detail around the PI. ?Like Nir said they are hired in secret and they investigate, so just "hires PI is fine. curiously is okay by me. ?They've been dating for ages, she's always hinting, he asks, she says no. Even the PI being crap is okay.. Thing I think is lacking is the goal. HRead more
You can drop the detail around the PI. ?Like Nir said they are hired in secret and they investigate, so just “hires PI is fine.
curiously is okay by me. ?They’ve been dating for ages, she’s always hinting, he asks, she says no.
Even the PI being crap is okay.. Thing I think is lacking is the goal. How goes figuring out truth from fiction win back his girlfriend? ?Explain that instead.
See lessA French village and pacifist priest must work with a bloodthirsty resistance group to fight invading Nazi’s and save 5000 Jews from extermination using only their Protestant values, an amateur forger and a one-legged female spy. *True Holocaust Story*
There is a saying with a logline "Sell don't Tell". If you remove "using" onwards you have a pretty good logline. You are selling a story that would make a read want to read more. You have mystery without confusion. I would remove pacifist from in front of priest as they all take a vow to do no harmRead more
There is a saying with a logline “Sell don’t Tell”.
If you remove “using” onwards you have a pretty good logline. You are selling a story that would make a read want to read more. You have mystery without confusion.
I would remove pacifist from in front of priest as they all take a vow to do no harm. I think it is s but like saying a wet fish. But it’s your call.
See lessA French village and pacifist priest must work with a bloodthirsty resistance group to fight invading Nazi’s and save 5000 Jews from extermination using only their Protestant values, an amateur forger and a one-legged female spy. *True Holocaust Story*
Take the shortest most compelling line through the story. Drop things like the resistance religious beliefs. Pacifist is not needed Priest is good enough. A priest struggles with his belief work with French resistance to save 5000 Jews.
Take the shortest most compelling line through the story. Drop things like the resistance religious beliefs. Pacifist is not needed Priest is good enough.
A priest struggles with his belief work with French resistance to save 5000 Jews.
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