1. Posted: July 9, 2016In:

    Wanting to go legit a young drug dealer must do one last run to rescue her sister being held hostage by her boss; knowing she be going to be killed.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    I have a first draft of the script. Your suggestions may help flesh out my thoughts. I posted a early version back in May.

    I have a first draft of the script. Your suggestions may help flesh out my thoughts. I posted a early version back in May.

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  2. Posted: July 1, 2016In:

    Honeymooners in the mountains, a man and woman, witness a poaching. The poacher now wants them dead, As they fight for their lives, they learn that time is not what it seems.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    Time isn't is what is too ambiguous. I read it and can't answer the most simple question "what is the story about?" Camping Honeymooners pursued by a poacher must .... While stuck in a time loop. Six words can set up the film, leave eleven for or so for detail of what happens.

    Time isn’t is what is too ambiguous. I read it and can’t answer the most simple question “what is the story about?”

    Camping Honeymooners pursued by a poacher must …. While stuck in a time loop.

    Six words can set up the film, leave eleven for or so for detail of what happens.

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  3. Posted: June 19, 2016In:

    When his girl disappears, a young man finds himself interfering in the last heist of an ageing crook who will stop at nothing to capture the girl he desperately needs to finish the job.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    His interfering is done how and with what aim? Plus how is the main character? This reads like the story is about the robber and the guy is a side issue.

    His interfering is done how and with what aim?

    Plus how is the main character? This reads like the story is about the robber and the guy is a side issue.

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