1. Posted: January 20, 2016In:

    When an underachieving gravedigger’s cemetery is taken over by his ex-girlfriend’s Mafioso father, he must rise to the occasion to regain control or end up losing more than just his job.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    A lot better. But rise to the Occassion is too ambiguous.

    A lot better. But rise to the Occassion is too ambiguous.

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  2. Posted: January 5, 2016In:

    A animal activist discovers human experiments not animal during a raid. She must survive murderous security to rescue a test subject and tell the world the truth.

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    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    Thanks FFF. loglines are my weakest skill. I'll give it go and repost soon. ?But you have outlined the story in a nutshell. ?The human can be anyone. ?Different people bring different things. Another female, she could see how it could be her, just some bad choices. Or a guy (my less favourite) but cRead more

    Thanks FFF.

    loglines are my weakest skill. I’ll give it go and repost soon. ?But you have outlined the story in a nutshell. ?The human can be anyone. ?Different people bring different things.

    Another female, she could see how it could be her, just some bad choices. Or a guy (my less favourite) but could have some romantic elements. ?Or as you say the kid, which will bring out more fear in the audience as a kid always seems defenceless.

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  3. Posted: January 14, 2016In:

    It’s all fun and games at the cemetery for a twenty something gravedigger clinging to his youth, until his ex-girlfriend’s Mafioso father plots revenge for disrespecting his “little princess.”

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    You need to give your character something to do. ?In your line he doesn't have any impact on the story. ?Try this... After disrespecting his ex-girlfriend a twenty something grave digger must ........ before her?Mafioso father extracts his revenge. I also find cling to his youth a little confusing tRead more

    You need to give your character something to do. ?In your line he doesn’t have any impact on the story. ?Try this…

    After disrespecting his ex-girlfriend a twenty something grave digger must …….. before her?Mafioso father extracts his revenge.

    I also find cling to his youth a little confusing to for someone only twenty.

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