1. Posted: May 28, 2015In:

    When the bodyless talking brains of the most brilliant scientists want to leave the country, their simple minded transporter must learn to use his head to pass the frontier before the government or the resistance get their hands on them.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    Please tell me that he is constantly being helped and criticised by the brains. I am laughing at the thought of it.

    Please tell me that he is constantly being helped and criticised by the brains. I am laughing at the thought of it.

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  2. Posted: May 28, 2015In:

    An amnesiac who wakes up chained to a table in a mysterious room must uncover why sinister doctors are performing grisly operations on him.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    Not a bad logline. But the story seems less compelling. Just to find out why he is being cut up seems a little weak. Can probably be told well in your story, but lacks logline punch. Plus being amnesiac doesn't seem to impact on the story you are describing.

    Not a bad logline. But the story seems less compelling. Just to find out why he is being cut up seems a little weak. Can probably be told well in your story, but lacks logline punch. Plus being amnesiac doesn’t seem to impact on the story you are describing.

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  3. Posted: May 27, 2015In:

    After her teenage sister commits a sudden suicide, an anxiety-disordered young woman returns to her childhood home and begins to discover family secrets that lead her to investigate the tragedy.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    Investigate and discover secrets are the same thing from a logline POV. A sister returns to investigate her suicide and discovers.... What does she want? What is stopping her? What was the impact on her?

    Investigate and discover secrets are the same thing from a logline POV.

    A sister returns to investigate her suicide and discovers….

    What does she want?
    What is stopping her?
    What was the impact on her?

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