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When a mass murder shuts down production on an Arctic oil rig, an ambitious young oil exec is charged with managing the crisis only to be thrust into a battle for survival as an ancient fungus co-opts the first responders turning them into violent spore spreading rapists.
That's completely different to the first version. That reads very sinister. The first version was a bit like a 60's "carry on" movie. This is only word choice and comes down to writing style. I personally would use infects instead of co-opts, I would use massacre instead of mass murder, I think it iRead more
That’s completely different to the first version. That reads very sinister. The first version was a bit like a 60’s “carry on” movie. This is only word choice and comes down to writing style. I personally would use infects instead of co-opts, I would use massacre instead of mass murder, I think it implies no survivors.
The other lines were not BAD, but this the GOOD. Well done.
See lessA man?s drunken persona comes to life revealing a dark side.
I worked in bar in my teens. Sounds like every drunk. If the dark side is super dark give an example. Then say what happens. Dark side could be a murderous past, or uncontrollable rage. How does this change the world? Put yourself in a producer's shoes. They read your lines and can't make an assessmRead more
I worked in bar in my teens. Sounds like every drunk.
If the dark side is super dark give an example. Then say what happens. Dark side could be a murderous past, or uncontrollable rage. How does this change the world? Put yourself in a producer’s shoes. They read your lines and can’t make an assessment. How many characters? What era, is it a costume drama?
If you take the view a logline is a sales pitch, what is being sold?
See lessA man?s drunken persona comes to life revealing a dark side.
I worked in bar in my teens. Sounds like every drunk. If the dark side is super dark give an example. Then say what happens. Dark side could be a murderous past, or uncontrollable rage. How does this change the world? Put yourself in a producer's shoes. They read your lines and can't make an assessmRead more
I worked in bar in my teens. Sounds like every drunk.
If the dark side is super dark give an example. Then say what happens. Dark side could be a murderous past, or uncontrollable rage. How does this change the world? Put yourself in a producer’s shoes. They read your lines and can’t make an assessment. How many characters? What era, is it a costume drama?
If you take the view a logline is a sales pitch, what is being sold?
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