1. Posted: October 25, 2018In:

    A Secret Service agent, must kill the President to save the Presidency. After years in exile, he must help save his estranged daughter, the newest President, when she is taken hostage.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    I am confused. Can you explain, how killing his daughter (which is what I believe you have explained) would help. It?s good to have intrigue but not outright confusion.

    I am confused. Can you explain, how killing his daughter (which is what I believe you have explained) would help.

    It?s good to have intrigue but not outright confusion.

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  2. Posted: October 24, 2018In:

    When her orbital city of New Delhi is destroyed, a spirited Indian girl escapes to Freedom city determined to join the space force and take down the evil prophet of New Babylon, who?s responsible for the loss of everyone she loved.?

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    Some stories are all plot, Misery for example. The characters don?t change and they have only physical and immediate needs. The logline you have tells me that?s this movie, which is great. But if it is more about character then A girl seeking revenge for the destruction of her planet .....

    Some stories are all plot, Misery for example. The characters don?t change and they have only physical and immediate needs. The logline you have tells me that?s this movie, which is great.

    But if it is more about character then

    A girl seeking revenge for the destruction of her planet …..

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  3. Posted: October 25, 2018In:

    A group of assassins from around the world race against time in NYC to get to the prize that has the key to stopping bombs that are about to kill them.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    Just need time and place ?race across 17th century Morocco?, ?London?. Otherwise cool. Are they competing or cohorts

    Just need time and place ?race across 17th century Morocco?, ?London?. Otherwise cool.

    Are they competing or cohorts

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