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"(Based on my own true story) An autistic artist recognizes that as he gets older he increasingly exhibits genius level intellegence despite his decreasing ability to verbally express himself. As he begins to solve the world?s most distructive problems in his mind, ultimately will the solutions everRead more
“(Based on my own true story) An autistic artist recognizes that as he gets older he increasingly exhibits genius level intellegence despite his decreasing ability to verbally express himself. As he begins to solve the world?s most distructive problems in his mind, ultimately will the solutions ever be accepted in time to save humans from themselves?”
You have too much backstory. The backstory can be distilled down to a description. I don’t know the exact word but something like “nonverbal autistic savant” or something as opposed to “An autistic artist recognizes that as he gets older he increasingly exhibits genius level intellegence despite his decreasing ability to verbally express himself.” The real plot is the last sentence. Since it’s based on a true story I would say there’s less need of the traditional format. But these questions are the basics of a logline:
See lessWho is the protagonist? : Autistic artist
What is the inciting incident? : Not explicitly stated, but logically it would be the discovery of the problem he’s trying to solve.
Goal? : To solve the problem and save mankind(?)
Action: To solve the problem.
And, what is the hook? To me it’s 1) a true story and 2) the autistic angle.
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After his wife gives birth to a stillborn, a wizard has three days to enlist the help of the state?s only necromancer to resurrect his daughter and break a generational curse that will kill all the female children born into the family.
?When he discovers his unborn child is to be a girl, a wizard must track down and capture the villainous necromancer to remove?a curse that?s killing his female offspring? Interesting idea. However, in your post you say the wizard can resurrect people, but that's the point of the story: he can't, soRead more
?When he discovers his unborn child is to be a girl, a wizard must track down and capture the villainous necromancer to remove?a curse that?s killing his female offspring?
Interesting idea. However, in your post you say the wizard can resurrect people, but that’s the point of the story: he can’t, so he has to get someone’s help. And in your suggestion, at least in any story I’ve read, necromancers can only deal with people who are already dead, which means that cursing someone living is out of their power(so just replace necromancer with sorcerer, wizard, whatever). Unless it’s different in Lorato’s version.
See lessAs to whether the daughter is dead/about to be born, I don’t think it matters much. The stakes are the same: can he save his daughter-and somehow by extension-and the rest of his female bloodline? I can only take a guess that Lorato’s idea is that the resurrection is very thing which breaks the curse.
Anyway, I hope this helps.
After his wife gives birth to a stillborn, a wizard has three days to enlist the help of the state?s only necromancer to resurrect his daughter and break a generational curse that will kill all the female children born into the family.
Nice rework by OrinaryDreams. Wizards and necromancers are different, which is why they have different names. The case is probably that while the wizard can perform some necromancy, he doesn't have the skill or power to the effect of a full-fledged necromancer. I do agree that if the lead is anotherRead more
Nice rework by OrinaryDreams. Wizards and necromancers are different, which is why they have different names. The case is probably that while the wizard can perform some necromancy, he doesn’t have the skill or power to the effect of a full-fledged necromancer. I do agree that if the lead is another straight, white male then I urge you to consider making it more diverse, which is sorely lacking in fantasy stories.
As for who’s the protagonist, it seems obvious it’s the character who has the stakes, I assume that enlisting the necromancer’s help is possibly an obstacle in itself, maybe a clash of personalities or something.
I can cut some more words:?After his daughter is stillborn, a wizard has three days to enlist a necromancer to resurrect her and break the family curse killing female children.?
If the idea is that the necromancer is reluctant for some reason then you could add retired to describe him/her, or something to indicate that the necromancer is reluctant.
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