Sign Up Sign Up

Captcha Click on image to update the captcha.

Have an account? Sign In Now

Sign In Sign In

Forgot Password?

If you'd like access, Sign Up Here

Forgot Password Forgot Password

Lost your password? Please enter your email address. You will receive a link and will create a new password via email.

Captcha Click on image to update the captcha.

Have an account? Sign In Now

Sorry, you do not have permission to ask a question, You must login to ask a question.

Forgot Password?

To see everything, Sign Up Here

Sorry, you do not have permission to ask a question, You must login to ask a question.

Forgot Password?

To see everything, Sign Up Here

Please briefly explain why you feel this question should be reported.

Please briefly explain why you feel this answer should be reported.

Please briefly explain why you feel this user should be reported.

Logline It! Logo Logline It! Logo
Sign InSign Up

Logline It!

Logline It! Navigation

  • Sign Up
  • Logline Generator
  • Learn our simple Logline Formula
  • Search Loglines
Search
Post Your Logline

Mobile menu

Close
Post Your Logline
  • Signup
  • Sign Up
  • Logline Generator
  • Learn our simple Logline Formula
  • Search Loglines
  • About
  • Questions
  • Answers
  • Best Answers
  1. Posted: August 3, 2016In: Action

    ?In order to help create an international antiterrorism taskforce, the D. o. D. Director of Psychological Operations Dr. Samantha Ryan struggles to overcome her ex husband and the terrorists with whom he is associated.?

    Dkpough1 Uberwriter
    Added an answer on August 3, 2016 at 11:51 am

    "In order to help create an international antiterrorism taskforce,?a Department of Defense?Director struggles to overcome her ex husband and the terrorists with whom he is associated.? Again, "struggles to overcome" is too vague. What specifically does she do? Does she have to infiltrate the terroriRead more

    “In order to help create an international antiterrorism taskforce,?a Department of Defense?Director struggles to overcome her ex husband and the terrorists with whom he is associated.?

    Again, “struggles to overcome” is too vague. What specifically does she do? Does she have to infiltrate the terrorist cell? What is it?

    See less
    • 0
    • Share
      Share
      • Share on Facebook
      • Share on Twitter
      • Share on LinkedIn
      • Share on WhatsApp
  2. Posted: July 31, 2016In: SciFi

    An orphaned young woman discovers she’s only half human when an Alien warrior is unleashed on earth to destroy the only weapon capable of stopping the forthcoming invasion, her.

    Best Answer
    Dkpough1 Uberwriter
    Added an answer on August 2, 2016 at 9:49 am

    Actually, from what I've seen, this story wouldn't really fall under the Mighty Whitey trope anyway, but still the type of story usually creates that situation. It's not really even Chosen One material, she's just a girl who has powers, it not the "there was an ancient prophecy that you are the oneRead more

    Actually, from what I’ve seen, this story wouldn’t really fall under the Mighty Whitey trope anyway, but still the type of story usually creates that situation. It’s not really even Chosen One material, she’s just a girl who has powers, it not the “there was an ancient prophecy that you are the one to kill this person” situation. Put even if she is part alien, as you said it does not stop a blonde, blue-eyed person from being cast. Or even from someone casting the character as male.

    See less
    • 0
    • Share
      Share
      • Share on Facebook
      • Share on Twitter
      • Share on LinkedIn
      • Share on WhatsApp
  3. Posted: July 30, 2016In: Action

    Following a career-defining launch of a state of the art submarine, a high-ranking U. S. government official finds her life turned upside down after she learns that her estranged husband is hunting her.

    Dkpough1 Uberwriter
    Added an answer on August 2, 2016 at 9:28 am

    Spider-Man is a well known story, one of the most well known characters in the world. You were more likely to be familiar with it than some obscure action film I think up. Of all of the Star Wars films, Padame's death is not the inciting incident of any. Certainly not "Revenge of the Sith", where itRead more

    Spider-Man is a well known story, one of the most well known characters in the world. You were more likely to be familiar with it than some obscure action film I think up.
    Of all of the Star Wars films, Padame’s death is not the inciting incident of any. Certainly not “Revenge of the Sith”, where it happens at the end. I am not sure what point you are trying to make; Padame does die, Vader does eventually find out that Luke is his son, and he never goes after Padame. So, no, I don’t get it. I get what actually happens in the films.
    To use Star Wars as an example, the inciting incident of “A New Hope” is when the Stormtroopers kill Luke’s family. That event makes change his mind about becoming a Jedi, and he goes with Ben Kenobi to help him deliver the message to Leia, and to train to be a Jedi. The inciting incident is not Padame’s death. Padame’s death help sets up the situation, yes, but an inciting incident it is not.
    Likewise, “Liam Dunham?comitted treason while with the C. I. A. He was sent to prison. He was freed from prison by mistake. He now seeks revenge.” is not an inciting incident. It is set up to what is implied happens: him attacking his wife or doing whatever it is which drives her to action.

    “In order to help create an international antiterrorism taskforce, The D. o. D. Director of Psychological Operations Dr. Samantha Ryan struggles to overcome her ex husband and the terrorists with whom he is associated.”
    The common practice is, that unless it is a character from an existing franchise or a real person, do not name the characters. ?’Struggles to overcome’ is vague. What does she do? Does she investigate, does she infiltrate a terrorist organzation? What specific action does she take?

    See less
    • 0
    • Share
      Share
      • Share on Facebook
      • Share on Twitter
      • Share on LinkedIn
      • Share on WhatsApp
1 … 106 107 108 109 110 … 161

Sidebar

Stats

  • Loglines 8,003
  • Reviews 32,191
  • Best Reviews 629
  • Users 3,741

screenwriting courses

Adv 120x600

aalan

Explore

  • Signup

Footer

© 2022 Karel Segers. All Rights Reserved
With Love from Immersion Screenwriting.