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An attention seeking YouTube prankster shames and bribes a violent scammer resulting in a battle beyond entertainment.
"An attention seeking YouTube prankster shames and bribes a violent scammer resulting in a battle beyond entertainment."-What is his goal? -What does he do to achieve it?I don't think "YouTube prankster" is any good in the logline. That may be what he is, but it is too vague. Attention seeking is thRead more
“An attention seeking YouTube prankster shames and bribes a violent scammer resulting in a battle beyond entertainment.”
-What is his goal?
-What does he do to achieve it?
I don’t think “YouTube prankster” is any good in the logline. That may be what he is, but it is too vague. Attention seeking is the trait. ? Now, what type of pranks? Malicious? ?Does he record people sitting on whoopy cushions? What does he do? That helps to define what type of character he is. It helps define exactly what he’ll do to get the attention he seeks.
Example:?When an infamous scammer?cons??a famous YouTube practical joker, the joker plans to play a trick on the scammer and post a video to bring more viewers to his channel.?(~31 words).
See lessThat’s kind of weak because I couldn’t think of a trick so it’s vague, but the joker has a goal, in fact, a two-for-one deal: to embarrass the scammer, and to bring more of the attention he seeks. What does he do to achieve it? He plays whatever trick on the scammer, recording it and posting it on his channel.
Now, for your story and logline, answer those two questions
What is his goal? What does he do to achieve it?
When two robbers conspire to rob from their rich friend’s arts gallery shop, stealing and selling an ancient sculpture to a ghost arts collector. Their success only attracts an endless torment that taunts them and their families until they retrieve and return their friend’s mysterious artifact.
"When two robbers conspire to rob from their rich friend?s arts gallery shop, stealing and selling an ancient sculpture to a ghost arts collector. Their success only attracts an endless torment that taunts them and their families until they retrieve and return their friend?s mysterious artifact." -WRead more
“When two robbers conspire to rob from their rich friend?s arts gallery shop, stealing and selling an ancient sculpture to a ghost arts collector. Their success only attracts an endless torment that taunts them and their families until they retrieve and return their friend?s mysterious artifact.”
-What makes them conspire to rob their rich friend’s shop? Why would they turn on their friend? : When their [rich friend] does [action],?two robbers?break into his art gallery shop to steal and sell a priceless artifact.?
The last part is vague. That seems to be the bulk of the story. What “endless torment that taunts them and their families” do they attract?
When they sell a stolen ancient sculpture to a ghost arts collector, two robbers must track down the artifact and return it to the owner.?
See less“When he discovers his father will be fired as coach if he doesn’t bring home a championship, a popular quarterback must rally his good looking and talented team to beat the scruffy, overachieving, underdogs that, every year seem to defeat them in the final game.” -Overdogs-
I think the father's job on the line could be moved to later in the story so it is what adds stakes before the end of the story.
I think the father’s job on the line could be moved to later in the story so it is what adds stakes before the end of the story.
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