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When an 11 year old accidentally clones himself, he is swept up in an audacious plot to kidnap world leaders and must use all his ingenuity to save his father, his friends, his unexpected twin and the world.
I have to say that I agree with Lemmy, that his concept isn't flawed simply because his logline lacks focus. Stories that are long should have more than one plot and should be complex. However, the logline should focus on the inciting incident(cloning) and then what the character(s) do in response tRead more
I have to say that I agree with Lemmy, that his concept isn’t flawed simply because his logline lacks focus. Stories that are long should have more than one plot and should be complex. However, the logline should focus on the inciting incident(cloning) and then what the character(s) do in response to that.
See lessIn your comment you say he has to teach the clone to be human, but why? Why does the MC care if the clone is hijacked?
Perhaps your inciting incident shouldn’t even be the cloning itself. Maybe something like when his clone starts acting strangely or is kidnapped or the clone is found after he went missing. That way you can link that incident to the rest of the plot more easily, hinting at the antagonist’s objective.
When an 11 year old accidentally clones himself, he is swept up in an audacious plot to kidnap world leaders and must use all his ingenuity to save his father, his friends, his unexpected twin and the world.
Agreed, too much. Focus on one plot. After he clones himself, what does that directly cause? Describe that.
Agreed, too much. Focus on one plot. After he clones himself, what does that directly cause? Describe that.
See lessA loser father?s innocent lie, that he is a superhero, puts his kids in trouble who are held as hostages with terrorist; and now he must fight them without breaking his kid?s myth that he is a superhero.
Dpg's version is great. I don't think you should add the wife unless she plays a key role, such as motivating him somehow. I think that the situation highlights his flaw, that he lied to his children, he felt the need to turn himself into an actual superhero in their eyes.
Dpg’s version is great. I don’t think you should add the wife unless she plays a key role, such as motivating him somehow. I think that the situation highlights his flaw, that he lied to his children, he felt the need to turn himself into an actual superhero in their eyes.
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