1. Posted: December 14, 2014In:

    Sophie Lamport, a headstrong, brilliant engineer, accepts her dream job developing a new form of energy storage on an isolated wind farm in Northern Ontario. But on the night of a ferocious windstorm, Sophie encounters a sinister power which changes the course of her research and mental state, forever.

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    Then that seems to present her with an authentic dilemma. And dilemma is always a good thing in drama. If she succeeds in solving the engineering problem, the aliens will exploit the technology for their own use. If she fails to solve the problem, homo sapiens and most other species on the planet arRead more

    Then that seems to present her with an authentic dilemma. And dilemma is always a good thing in drama. If she succeeds in solving the engineering problem, the aliens will exploit the technology for their own use. If she fails to solve the problem, homo sapiens and most other species on the planet are f***ed.

    But then, so are the aliens. Seems like a premise for a high tech, high stakes Mexican standoff.

    I’m not asking you to tip your hand for how the plot is resolved– and a logline should never do that — but do you have a firm sense of the solution to her dilemma?

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  2. Posted: December 14, 2014In:

    Sophie Lamport, a headstrong, brilliant engineer, accepts her dream job developing a new form of energy storage on an isolated wind farm in Northern Ontario. But on the night of a ferocious windstorm, Sophie encounters a sinister power which changes the course of her research and mental state, forever.

    dpg Singularity

    Then that seems to present her with an authentic dilemma. And dilemma is always a good thing in drama. If she succeeds in solving the engineering problem, the aliens will exploit the technology for their own use. If she fails to solve the problem, homo sapiens and most other species on the planet arRead more

    Then that seems to present her with an authentic dilemma. And dilemma is always a good thing in drama. If she succeeds in solving the engineering problem, the aliens will exploit the technology for their own use. If she fails to solve the problem, homo sapiens and most other species on the planet are f***ed.

    But then, so are the aliens. Seems like a premise for a high tech, high stakes Mexican standoff.

    I’m not asking you to tip your hand for how the plot is resolved– and a logline should never do that — but do you have a firm sense of the solution to her dilemma?

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  3. Posted: December 12, 2014In:

    When a remorseful vampire is mortally wounded by a ruthless hunter, she leads a team to steal a clean-blood serum from a high security processing facility in order to heal herself for the sake of her four-year-old son.

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    I'm willing to stay with the original concept, primarily because "a remorseful vampire" suggests it's a fable about redemption. (And I'm a sucker for redemption stories.) But I'm uncertain as to what the operative rules are in this imagined world. Does the premise entail a rule that vampire women caRead more

    I’m willing to stay with the original concept, primarily because “a remorseful vampire” suggests it’s a fable about redemption. (And I’m a sucker for redemption stories.)

    But I’m uncertain as to what the operative rules are in this imagined world. Does the premise entail a rule that vampire women can reproduce? And if so, wouldn’t that entail that her son would be a vampire also?

    Or did she become a vampire after her son was born? Now she’s trying to save herself so she can be a normal mother again. Is that what “for the sake of her son” means?

    Is the ruthless hunter the antagonist? What about the villainous vampire who infected her? Or did she volunteer, the vampire who gave her the fatal bite was only facilitating her own reckless decision? Does “remorseful” means she regrets her choice?

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