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Trouble occurs in the casino night clubs. Tough men and one woman are hired to control the crowds. Can they control themselves?
What nicholasandrewhalls says. >>Can they control themselves? At best, it's a neutral, at worst, a negative goal. The protagonist (and who is that?) needs to accomplish something more than slam the brakes on his/her emotions. There needs to be a positive, tangible goal as well.
What nicholasandrewhalls says.
>>Can they control themselves?
At best, it’s a neutral, at worst, a negative goal. The protagonist (and who is that?) needs to accomplish something more than slam the brakes on his/her emotions. There needs to be a positive, tangible goal as well.
See lessHarriet Quimby, America's first licensed female pilot in 1911, said all she wanted was "to be first." She wasn't afraid to die trying.
Okay. Do you have a central idea, theme or premise which ties the whole series together? Harriet Quimby lived a varied, albeit abbreviated, life. Aviation only occupied the last couple of years or so. So I can envision a string of pearls, interesting incidents and episodes that end with her untimelyRead more
Okay. Do you have a central idea, theme or premise which ties the whole series together? Harriet Quimby lived a varied, albeit abbreviated, life. Aviation only occupied the last couple of years or so.
So I can envision a string of pearls, interesting incidents and episodes that end with her untimely death. But what do you conceive to be the plot?
See lessDetermined and short of money, a young boy aims to swim and fly to his dream paradise on the wildest island of Tasmania.
My earlier post was in response to wilsondownunder's suggestion. I agree with the principle of character motivaton embedded in his suggestion. Which would seem to contradict my earlier statement, so I will attempt to clarify my reasoning. I said earlier: "His motivation doesn?t have to particularlyRead more
My earlier post was in response to wilsondownunder’s suggestion. I agree with the principle of character motivaton embedded in his suggestion. Which would seem to contradict my earlier statement, so I will attempt to clarify my reasoning.
I said earlier: “His motivation doesn?t have to particularly rational or realistic”. But it has to be credible, something an audience would believe a boy his age could believe in. You don’t specify the boy’s age, so I assume he’s still young enough to believe in Santa Claus. We, the audience, would have no problem buying his delusion because we all know it’s one parents perpetrate on their kids.
Global warming is a whole other issue, a whole other category. And here’s the major concern I have about using global warming: it’s a negative. The boy is motivated by fear of what global warming will do to Tasmania.
Now, it’s okay for the protagonist to be initially motivated by a negative — fear, hatred, greed, etc. — but even when it’s necessary it is neversufficient. Assuming a happy ending, the protagonist must also have a motivation that is positive.
Which is why I also concur with wilsonunder’s suggestion in the other thread. The boy should want to go to Tasmania for some positive reason, for some constructive objective end.
What is your story about? A boy going on a journey.
In my mind, that invokes the standard issue, archetypal theme of The Quest. (He is too young to cast his trip in that way, you, as the writer, aren’t)
It may be a comedy replete with misadventures, but it seems to me the boy is not just going to Tasmania, he’s going on a personal odyssey. It will change his life.
fwiw
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